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The way she Moves





I did not notice
her growing up
I see it now
the way she moves
the attention she gets











Andrew Hide

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  • maggiejamespoet silver member
    October 8, 2007

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    Excellent tanka! Especially poignant because, not only can one share in this growth from own experiences with children growing up, but I can feel the emotion behind the words. Well done!


  • Emerald13
    October 8, 2007

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    i have been back and forth to this a few times since you posted ... its lovely ... the title is gorgeous ...although it is a line from the poem (as it should be ) ... its quite a movement on its own ...

    i found this piece to be on many levels ... the pivot is nice and there is that definite shift in time .. the levels for me is it could be a daughter .. or a lover - you know, next door all those years ....

    i love it for its open endedness ... sooo nicely done >>> Gina