A sour taste of nicotine
entirely empty of the cigarette
poised between your rough lips
overtakes my tongue.
Is it really so simple?
My mouth touched yours, filling with...
bitterness.
I feel forgotten as you sway
to the rhythym of the music
that plays with empty meaning.
Singing with drug induced euphoria.
Is it really so empty?
This love, so miserably...
flawed.
Author notes
Option 6, bonjourbunnie.
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Some beautiful lines in this. I really like the first stanza and the last 5 lines of the poem. I'm not sure there is a love that isn't flawed...
Thanks for your entry and good luck in the contests
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Ooooo, I love this poem Dollface. It's amazing. I love the metaphors and the language and just everything. It's...amazing.
Thank you for entering.
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wow, such a great poem. i like it Thanks for entering and good luck
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contest???
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yeah, a contest. :]
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thisd is amazing, i loved the poem, i am more of a long poem reader, but you so pulled this off, i liked it lots thanks and good luck in the contest love lots..xxxx
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amazing imagery...
"drug-induced euphoria", awesome
:-)
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awesome! I like the whole thing! it put pictures into my mind. Good job!
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wow. this is awesome!!
little spelling error with "nicotene" its "nicotine"
but other than that, this is perfect.
xx
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