i'm a shadow in the dark
practically non-existent,
save the light from a flickering
lamp revealing my presence
was my life a continual step to an
eternity of mixed up emotions
How could it be called forever
when all sense of time is lost
i'm a shadow in the dark
practically non-existent,
just a spirit silhoutted by
a broken street lamp.
no one hears me
no one sees me
no one makes sense
of what i say
especially me.
comments r welcome...
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Reading this twice
I appreciate this poem even more the second time.
The lines: "How could it be called forever
when all sense of time is lost" ask a very philosophical question.
I reallly see your imagery better. I'm glad I came across it again!
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Amazing
This reminds of my own personal experiences. The shadow in the dark is not alone. Your choice of words are excellent and you have a good flow. I love your imagery and the metaphor. It's so amazing, I have nothing more to say.
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thanx hun
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wow i love this
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thanx
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hmmm.... deep but vague
allowing the reader to weave their own experiences into the text..
i like it
another great write
seej
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thank u !!!
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This poem is very personal and emotional, I really adore your chioice of words, I think this poem is just perfect! I didnt find a single flawn, my favorite part of this amazing poem was "no one hears me
no one sees me
no one makes sense
of what i say
especially me" I think you really got want you wanted people to read in this poem, best wishes, michael <3 -
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thanx michael glad u liked it...
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So emotional, I like this write. Many feeling you got out, sad words. Keep up the great writeing.
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thankees
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awww this is soooo sad! really strong too! Me likes!!!!! keep up the excellent work! and well I dont see you but I do hear you or well I see what you type anyway Im here for you! again great job!
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thanx hun mwah
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