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Ages Pass

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Ages Pass

Hands wipe the hours from my face
with all the things I see.
For years I have stood, in this place
as  people glance at me.
Tick, tock, tick tock, hear the past
and the present will never last.
Tick, tock, tick tock
Tick, tock, tick tock
Standing here as the hours passed.

Hands wipe the hours from my face
watching seconds tick by.
For years I have stood in this space.
They say that time can fly.
Sounding my chime on the hour,
standing fast like a bell tower.
Sounding my chime
Sounding my chime
Counting the ages with my pow’r.

Hands wipe the hours from my face,
ticking away the pain
and seconds pass without a trace
with only love to gain.
The ages pass they never knock
as I tell the time for my flock.
The ages pass
The ages pass
For I am the grandfather clock.

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Trijan Refrain
The Trijan Refrain, created by Jan Turner, consists of three 9-line stanzas, for a total of 27 lines. Line 1 is the same in all three stanzas, although a variation of the form is not to repeat the same line at the beginning of each stanza. In other words, the beginning line of each stanza can be different. The first four syllables of line 5 in each stanza are repeated as the double-refrain for lines 7 and 8. The Trijan Refrain is a rhyming poem with a set meter and rhyme scheme as follows:
Rhyme scheme: a/b/a/b/c/c/d, d refrain of first 4 words of line five /c
Meter: 8/6/8/6/8/8/4, 4 refrain/8

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  • Ringside
    January 3, 2008

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    The Blue lettering is difficult to read with this background.

    That said, this is one of the best pieces I have read in a very long time. Thank you sharing and congrats on the trophy.


  • Dalaney gold member
    December 31, 2007

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    ...can you give me private lessons, teach?
    I read and reread your poetry and your author
    notes, but it all gets so...out of whack...when
    I attempt to do what you do so...effortlessly.

    Happy New Year, darling...Love, Lane


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    December 29, 2007

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    Well you are reffering the universal truth of our life..you painted this truth so beautifully and yes in touching mode as well.. well..done....


  • Ithica silver member
    December 9, 2007

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    Poems about time are intriguing to me. Maybe because there never seems to be enough of it the older you get. I had a thing for a while collecting watches and clocks. It started to make me batty, so I gave it up. Slowly all my collection has been dispersed. I didn't gain any time (dang-it) but I am less stressed, hehe... Very solemn and graceful write...


  • anaisnais
    October 13, 2007

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    Amera this is beautiful please remind me to revisit once my lappy is back so I can look at the form in more detail and print as example. Your notes are most helpful, most kind of you as always.


  • Desire gold member
    October 9, 2007

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    Wow!!

    I say Wow to each piece penned
    just did not want to have redundant Wow as the opener..
    so Wow- ditto
    Love the form You used and I wanted to read more-
    more I tell You

    Hands wipe the hours from my face
    watching seconds tick by.
    For years I have stood in this space.
    They say that time can fly.

    Congratulations on Your trophy win too
    I'm so Proud
    Thank You for sharing Your Wonderful Talent!


    Best wishes to You Beautiful
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • capricornpoet
    October 9, 2007
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    mystery time piece

    Flowed as mysterious as time itself, whispering along time with a mystical face...

    my favorite lines...oozes metaphore

    The ages pass they never knock
    as I tell the time for my flock.
    The ages pass
    The ages pass
    For I am the grandfather clock.

    i need to try this form sometime i'm bookmarking this
    little jewel..






  • foreverxnow
    October 8, 2007
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    wow. this is really good. congrats on the silver =]


  • micol
    October 8, 2007

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    Beautiful. Repetition and variation re-create the rhythms of the clock itself. Fine choice of content for this form, of form for this content.

    In case you are interested, one of the most intriguing clock poems ever written is "On Time," by -- who else? -- Milton. He wrote it as a young man, as an exercise in the Italian canzonne form. But every word, every sound, every rhythm is perfect, down to and including the final hexametric line that carries time almost beyond the boundaries of the poem. Yours reminds me of the effects he achieved there.

    Well done.


  • Melodies
    October 8, 2007

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    Excellence!!

    The lines of this fine poem have the beat of the clock ticking, somehow... and I am impressed by this form! ++++ Lovely writing!


  • Swan song gold member
    October 8, 2007

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    You are awesome like always this was very lovely
    I have not heard form you so I thought i would come over and see what you have been up to


  • seamaiden
    October 8, 2007

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    OMG, this is a complicated looking form you have here and the poem is so lovely. Grandfather clocks are beautiful and you made them even lovelier with this wonderful work. You are a very good poet. I love this and wish you luck in the contest with it. Keep writing poet. seamaiden ♥


  • jo-el
    October 7, 2007

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    really loved that first line for each stanza. i've told you before how catchy this form is. and you handled it as usual....impeccably. not sure if the syllable count in the last line has to be structured. if not i was just thinkin that when readin it aloud it seemed to sound nicer to me with a couple of words dropped..like this: The ages pass
    The ages pass
    For grandfather clock. either way its exceptional. excellent expression


  • HaleyMary
    October 7, 2007

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    Great form write as always, Amera. Wonderful flow. This write made me think of life and the passing of time. sometimes life can seem to go by so fast, though sometimes it can seem to go by slowly. I guess it all depends on how busy people are in their lives. I find time seems to pass by more quickly when I'm busy rather than when I'm bored and looking at the clock every five minutes or so. Good luck in the contest.


  • bedovich
    October 7, 2007

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    wowwwwwwwwwwww sis its an honor to comment on a poem like this especially written by my kuyrig(sis in armenian) i lvoe you sis thanks for being a sister to me


  • Shofar-Quill
    October 7, 2007

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    Masterfully ascribed

    Oh the beauty and eloquence with which you ascribe the simplest profound themes. Then, as with toping on one’s cake, you elevate style distinctly; your muse brought me to a new dimension of understanding, as if awaking from a dream.

    Admiringly your,
    ~Milly


    • Amera gold member
      October 7, 2007
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      What a beautiful and eloquent comment; thank you.


  • captain howdy
    October 7, 2007

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    Very nice! You always do so many different forms with such ease that we hardly know it's a form at all! Beautiful as always! Best of luck in your contest!

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