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Midnight Fright

Little Johnny was just fifteen
When a dare of great fright was issued to him.
'Twas a dark and foggy night of last Hallow's Eve
As Johnny approached the haunting all believed.
One step at a time, he slowly made his way
Only to see frights he'd never come to say.

He entered the graveyard at twelve o'clock, Midnight,
When the ghostly terror took him by fright.
Much to his dismay, he saw the shadows walk
As the moon hid behind clouds of white chalk.
The figures approached, their mind set on his soul,
He turned to run, but forgot what he hadn't known.

The creatures followed on the ground at his feet
And pulled him down, knowing he was weak.
They consumed him whole, whispered frightful things,
And that night, the cemetery was filled with painful screams.

Little Johnny, now aged sixteen,
Awaits any who except the dare issued to them.
He watches from the graves unmarked by all,
Waiting for Midnight of Halloween to fall.
In the graveyard, his soul is forever marked
The evil of all, and everything dark.

He waits impatiently for a victim of his own
So that he may speak of what has been shown.
When the moon sinks behind the clouds of new,
Beware, for his next mark may be you.

Author notes

Again, not my best write... I'm having a little bit of writer's block today...

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  • Little Eagle Greeters member
    November 1, 2007
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    Thanks for your entry

    This was a good concept and there was a little roughness but still a good poem. The flow was a little off I think it is in the wording that makes it feel a little off. But I still like the idea behind it. A warning to all indeed.

    Happy Halloween
    Tammy


  • Kappa Pyua
    October 31, 2007

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    this is a very scary poem, chilled me to my bones, this is a perfect example of a halloween legend born, thanks for entering contest.


  • Errant Panther gold member
    October 12, 2007

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    a captivating read for someone who has had a reluctant muse, good use of rhyme and haunting imagery, job well done.

  • June-bug
    October 11, 2007

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    Wonderful job, great flow and the imagery is well done. It has the making of a chilling Halloween tail. I will be sure not to take the dare. Thanks for entering and good luck.


  • xxlisajazminexx
    October 8, 2007

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    happy halloween!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    i love halloween ad this was just wonderful!!!!!!!!!!!!
    "-----------------------------------------------
    THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR ENTERING THIS WONDERFUL PIECE INTO MY CONTEST!!!!!!!-----
    WISHING YOU MUCH LOVE----
    AND GOOD LUCK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    XxLisaJazminexX
    _____________________________________________________________


  • Glasyalabolas
    October 8, 2007

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    This is a good piece, instilled in it right from the start is a high level of creepyness, which it maintains throughout, with a good use of wording and rhyming scheme to hold the story and atmosphere.

    Good write.


  • Knight70 silver member
    October 7, 2007

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    haunting imagery.....

    He entered the graveyard at twelve o'clock, Midnight,
    When the ghostly terror took him by fright.
    Much to his dismay, he saw the shadows walk
    As the moon hid behind clouds of white chalk.


    I love the metaphor in your description of the clouds.
    I love the vivid details in this piece. It reminds me of some of the dares that I remember from my teens. I really love to read and write in this genre. It was a pleasure to read. Certainly, little Johnny is more than happy not to be the victim again.

  • Mercury Rising
    October 7, 2007

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    Wow, this is just a wonderful halloween poem, with excellent rhythm and rhyme, and terribly delightful to read. Best of luck n the contest with this marvelous poem.

    Mercury Rising

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