If you were there, you would have heard
The many explosions that occured.
The desperate cries of dying men
Who never could go home again.
If you were there, you'd be able to see
Just how brave these men could be,
Grey earth stained with tears and gore...
And all this pain to end a war.
If you were there, then you would feel
The devastation was very real.
So much sorrow, so much strife,
And to protect us, they gave their life.
If you were there, then you would know
There was nowhere to hide and nowhere to go.
Fighting this battle until the end,
The death of a soldier, the loss of a friend.
If you were there...I thank you!
Author notes
My first thingy submitted to this site. WonderBandAlice, my rival-by-my-own-choice and bestish friend from school, forced me into writing something. Soooo, here's something for ya. ~ _ ^
I wrote this for a grade 6 Rememberance Day contest. It got me $300, second place in all of Canada for my age group, and a publishing deal. Tell me if it's as good as people say it is!
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I LIKE IT.
a lot, but it depress me -
Great, as I said, but reading it again I find that the 3rd verse is mildly weaker than the others. It doesn't scan as well. Ha ha ha, it's still good though. )
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Hn, yeah, it's sorta...icky. I could do better, you know.
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The do it. Lol, write something new.
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I will someday; for now, I'm working on a bunch of stories on Fanart.
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I love the line "Nowhere to hide and nowhere to go". I AM your rival, too! Ha ha ha. But I am the best, so there. Awww, I'm your Bestish Friend? SCORE!
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Yeah? Well I can burn in Japanese. Urasai, bakamono.
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Yeah? Well I can burn in German! IHRE MUTTER!!!
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