Standing in alleys dark shadows
watching a tall slender blond
walking, with a large framed man,
into the busy boulevard cafe.
Face deeply scared
from cheekbone to chin
the man lurked out of sight
calculating his deadly move.
His job is stress and decision free
occasionally working twelve hours a week
only really working thirty minutes of that
client is his boss, he follow's orders.
In his business, it's simple protocol
he doesn't need to know what the crumb did.
Like last night, his boss, the pigeon and him
all get in the back seat, going for lunch.
Two wise guys in a Lincoln's front seat
they pick them up right on time,
usual introductions, laughing crap
they go to lunch, some dive on 33rd street.
Ordering, "It's on me," say's his boss.
Food comes and everyone's cool
eating and having a gay ole' time.
he know's when someone's on the carpet.
The boss is seeing what he can shag
with his Kirby, while they eat
one of the pigeons is shaking bad
can't even feed himself, he's nervous.
"put his menudo in a doggie bag!
he can take it home for later."
When he leaves it's sitting on the table,
"whats wrong not going to be hungry later?"
Boss has him left here , right there
straight ahead, right to the stables
"we're going horseback riding" Boss laughs.
"you like horses?"
He looks at him and say's,"blow his head off,"
I pull my .357 magnum out and ... BANG!
"Don't want him to get lonely, you drive".
BANG! BANG!, "guess I can have the menudo, hey boss"
They throw the menudo out on the ground
with the two dead men, drive away laughing.
Tonight he was alone and had his marks.
He liked working alone doing it his way
so he could fulfill his lust of murder,
He loved the fear in his victims face.
Crossing the street to a phone booth.
It was only a few feet from their car.
He planned on molesting her
as he gunned down her boyfriend.
Then he was going to take her with him
He watched them through the phonebooth glass
as they sauntered towards their car.
She stood back as her friend unlocked the door.
He stepped out grabbed around her waist.
her friend turned and was shot in the chest
before he fell to the side walk he was shot again.
He picked up the keys put her in and got in.
He pulled into an empty lot
ripped her dress off just before
her boyfriend shoved a knife through his neck.
she screamed,"Oh thank God your still alive."
He said, "yes I am really lucky,
allot luckier than you are,"
he pulled out a gun and BANG!
Shot her, "sorry strictly business you know."
He dials his cell phone...
"Yeah boss worked out just like you said
both in her car dead. what,...
Do I want to come over for some menudo?
sure I'll be right there."
Author notes
Forms: All accepted
Rules: no profanities, no chat lingo, no sticky cap
Theme: Inside the Mind of a Killer
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Comments
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lol this would a make a fun horror movie
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HAHA
i don't know why but i managed to find humor in this! I ABSOLUTELY LOVE the story line, it felt like watching a suspenseful movie
^_^
VERY WELL DONE AND KUDOS, thanks much for entering, best of luck to you!
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lol!!! i love it!!..it is so strange to have humor in a scary story..love how the killer is so nonchalant about the murder..and i learn a new word..menudo..a mexican soup..i might try it next time..nice dialogue also.." sorry strictly business you know." a bit cliche but fit well w/ the killer's personality..nice job
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Wicked!
This was wickedly fabtastic! I loved it from beginning to end, which was excellent! Best of luck in the contest! -
Wicked!
This was wickedly fabtastic! I loved it from beginning to end, which was excellent! Best of luck in the contest! -
I feel you have a winner here my friend, go for it...MM
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wow dear that was amazing
truly as it held my attention
this poem is worthy of a movie
*looks around*
where are those directors
*shakes head*
never around when you want them
Riftkin -
This was a tad bit psycotic, but it was fun to read LOL
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