Teen angst is inert;
burned out and faded away.
I thought it would hurt,
but it's caused me no pain.
You may come as you were,
but you won't sound the same.
With the lights on, it's less dangerous;
here we are now,
time has aged us.
We were stupid,
and contagious,
we are here now,
but time has changed us.
Pointless defiance is insignificant;
while dead rebels lead no cause.
Apathy precedes the discontent,
in which this era ends.
This we must accept,
no more time to pretend.
With the lights on, it's less dangerous;
here we are now,
time made us.
Author notes
My first real piece of work in more than a year, almost two to be honest. There is something to be said about the first piece of writing after a long drought; but I wouldn't call it satisfaction, more or less it is relief that it eventually came.
This deals with some things I have been thinking about the past few months, likely iniated by my changed musical preference. The influence of the second stanza should be obvious to most people, as well as some references in the first. I don't know if this will make sense to many of you, but it does to me. I may have to do something to edit it, and I hope any problems are commented on, as I want to improve.
Humble Thanks,
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What do you think of the flow?
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I think its great well done
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I actually really liked it. Despite your hesitant authors notes you really have a great, honest, intelligent idea here. The whole self-pity and deprication only takes you so far in life and you show that transition into being a mature adult really well. Welcome back to the writing world (I'm new so we're kinda in the same boat here I guess) and great write.
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when we know the price of darkness we are sure to realise the value of brightness
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This is beautiful and honest. I really like this. Especially the last three lines. I can relate to a lot of this. Time really does change people.
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Welcome to AllPoetry
This poem carries a strong message and is well written. The poem has a good rhythm and the rhyme scheme enhances the read.
Well written. I cannot tell what initiated this for you but I do connect with where it is coming from.
Glad to have you here at AP and please feel free to contact me or any online Greeter if you need help here at AP.
Let the ink flow and your fingers dance
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Dde! you have the natural voice rhythms I can hear them Keep at it this is not a bad poem at all.
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i like this. it really brings out the point of time and change. it does make sence to me though to many it might not. hope to see more soon!!!!!!!
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Thanks!
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your very welcome.
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I like this piece, it reminds me of change and how we go through many phases in our life which bring us to who we are. I'm 46 yet still changing or perhaps its more like changing again. I truly believe we are always growing, perhaps taking another path, one we declined to travel in the past. Keep writing poet! Kelly
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Thanks so much for your praise!
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Male Consolidation ...
Poet ... I've got friends sitting on the same bar stools and rehashing the same footall games they played 30 years ago. The last 'form' they ever knew with any significance was their teens. So, don't consolidate with ideas like ... Pointless defiance is insignificant ... and most of the 3rd stanza. You might feel this way ... but you are a lot more than your feelings.
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Thanks for your comment!
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its preety good. very true and very real.
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wow
this is really tounching,i love it
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