You can grasp hate and hold it
Feel it and mold it
Curl it into a ball
Release it and fall
It’s malleable beyond belief
And can lead to your own defeat
It’s hard as cement once settled down
Can break when healing tides do pound
There are no secrets that it hides
And no rules by which it abides
It’s passionate but logical
Inexplicable and tolerable
Willpower it can over tower
An endless day and timeless hour
Repeating regret whispers away
Hammering softly of the fray
Such bitterness you won’t miss
For the reasons you won’t list
But how is it to disappear?
Will the divine make it clear?
Author notes
I don't particularly like this, nor feel anything about what I'm describing. It's another one of those five-minute jobbies (okay, five-and-a-half) .
Written October 5th, 2003
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wow i like this poem alot,its one of the best i've read and too abd i don't have anymore applauses left i'd give you all three,i love the imagery and the rhyme andit flows really well,good job! -
Reminds me of a limerick I saw written on a restroom stall. I won't go into it here...
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was that really 5 minutes? because i think go
Roll hate into a ball and disregard it. Hate is never something you want to hold onto because it will destroy you. I liked the head trip this poem gave for me...good job -
Yeah, it's a five-minute job.
I think one thing that could have been done to give this poem a little more imagery is to take an image an expand on it. For instance, in the first stanza, there is mention of a ball. The first thing that sprang into my mind was sports metaphors-- football (nice aggressive sport), basketball, baseball. These sports have their images, expressions, smells and sounds that could contribute to a poem on hate. -
It's obvious reading this and reading your comment that you didn't feel what you wrote. Not that it was a bad piece of poetry, far from it, just that it seemed like a piece that wasn't really close to your heart.
If this poem has a single strong point, I'd have to say the rhyme. You've done that well. As for the poem's content, I found it a little simplistic in some points, but then it would bounce back with a profound statement. The fourth stanza was undoubtedly the strongest. -
Hate can hold you back...can leave you empty...let go and move forth...your
words are heard...very good poem , thanks for sharing 
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yeah.. i am going on a will power kick... i dig it...
Doug -
in one word..... amazing.
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WOAH! This is amazing. If you don't like this...then I can't imagine what the ones that you do like must be like. I love this...I added it to my favorites, too. Wow. Great job, keep writing, and I'll keep reading!
Nikihayami -
wow that is some powerful stuff...i like...good write
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