Forgotten weapon
Blood flows through thorax
Victim seen through others eyes
By blade used before
Sudden comfort
Unknown presence felt
Slight brush on exposed skin
As fangs penetrate
Forced
Darkness covers me
Gagged and hooded tossed in trunk
Kidnapped at knife point
Author notes
Modification of a Haiku writing more similar to a Senryu write
In a list
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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you so deep with this one mykeee i must say i like this thought you really did a great job with taking on the pic with this form it impressed me hope to read more
juju
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I have to remove this, but feel free to enter another, I extented the contest "Show Me Fear"
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I agree, the form here is excellent. I enjoyed reading this piece very much. It did break the rules a bit though by using scary situations to describe fear, instead of teaching me fear, the feeling itself.
but again, This is still a very good piece.
Thank you so much for entering my contest. I'm glad I read this poem.
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Indeed fear is here Keee
I liked this form. You never cease to amaze me with all this Talent. I will be there soon, my friend.
I will never catch up to you, but its one helava try.
CoCo~Cherry
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