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Paranoid Mind

Who can be called,

Who can one tell,

Everyone is gone,

Yes, especially you.

 

That feeling creeps in,

Starting deep down,

Flowing up and over,

Paralyzing, scary, and much too painful.

 

The tears won't fall,

The emotions won't escape,

Piling up inside,

Feelings that won't break.

 

Thay've all come to stay,

Down in the soul,

What can be trusted,

When a heart becomes a hole?

 

Tell me what you will,

It'll be beleive to be true,

But one voice inside,

Says not to listen to you.

Author notes

God, I hate this feeling. I've kind of always gone be the saying, "Just because you're paranoid doesn't mean you're wrong." However, in this instance I'm pretty sure I am... At least I really hope I am.

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  • Dragons Lady
    October 30, 2007

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    Oh i know that feeling and can relate to that so well. Paranoia is not always a bad thing. Well written with nice flow and vivid imagery.


  • Alittle2lost
    October 21, 2007

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    i know that feeling. that feeling sucks. but as i've always said, some of the best writing comes from some of the worst places.
    it's good. really good. but i do hope you get out of that feeling. good luck.


  • StarrieNacht
    October 7, 2007
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    Its a great start!! This write feels undone though...