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"Unimaginable"

I love the way  your voice soothes
melted chocolate buttery smooth
laughter fills our day 

 bringing sun shined hearts.

 


Eyes peering  through bruised souls
touching warmth  heals wounds
entwined pains

 together slathering salve on each

 


Blood rushes my cheeks  innocents simplicity
a woman , a child

 time when i know no difference
kissing lips fade  disappearing into one

 


Hands clasped  locking embers flame
scarlet long hair  smoothness upon fingertips
naturalness between

 heartbeats understanding

 


One moment copper coins flow from heaven
unimaginable love

 streams colorful ribbon
that bind  two hearts

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  • Emo Hearted Emz
    June 18

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    What A Wonderful Poem I Love it

    this poem is by far the most wonderful all tho it does not rhyme it still wonderful and so full of love you are very talented the image is wonderful the poem is fantasic i love it


  • wvtwinklestar gold member
    September 17, 2008

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    Wonderful Expression

    Beautiful, inspirational and vivid poem.It is very touching and really well written. Bravo!
    love ya,
    Conni'


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    August 19, 2008

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    This poem is absolutely beautiful.. WOW... you did an excellent job. the imagery is is outstanding and vivid. you've created a masterpiece.

    Congratulations on the Silver Trophy.

    love you

    kat


  • Rose Angel gold member
    August 9, 2008
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    You have outdone yourself here. Beautiful imagery, words, and lovely emotions expressed here...One masterpiece of a write! It just flows and flows.


  • Xianaria gold member
    July 25, 2008
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    my baby got silver! yay!!!

  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    July 23, 2008
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    Thank you for your lovely entry, good luck in my contest, Josie


  • Terry Collett
    July 19, 2008
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    Fine voice; fine poem.

    Kind of unique in its voice; enjoyable in the telling.

  • Xianaria gold member
    July 19, 2008

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    Hands clasped locking embers flame
    scarlet long hair smoothness upon fingertips
    naturalness between
    heartbeats understanding

    ~ Sweetheart, this is a beautiful write. You're a romantic that kept dreaming even when in your darkest hour, and writes such as this emerged ~ and still do! Loved it, sincerely.

    Love~
    your romantic leading man
    Tim


  • lake of dremas
    April 10, 2008
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    lovely too.. i knew you're talented


  • Jalalbad gold member
    March 7, 2008
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    nice


  • WolfHeart
    February 4, 2008

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    Very dreamy and lovely. A truly romantic poem, this.
    Well-written and a joy to read.
    Blood rushes my cheeks. innocents simplicity
    a woman , a child. time when i know no difference
    kissing lips fade. disappearing into one

    This bit woke up the hormones and you have such a tasteful way of writing - just very nice!

  • nightlover
    January 6, 2008

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    such beauty you shared. could feel the kiss, embracing, touching hearts such tendernss, captures my soul, leaving me weak, inside the magic you describe. sweetly.

  • Rose Angel gold member
    November 30, 2007

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    This is a beautiful write,Lisa..extremely full of imagery and metaphors. I see visually all you describe...A lovely poem,,,,,I am bookmarking this....


  • LaMerci
    October 25, 2007

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    Well...

    Completely drawn into the metaphors Bejeweled and a beautiful way to open the morning. Breath-taking peice, just stunning! I have to go back and read this again.

  • PureCountry
    October 23, 2007

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    Absolutely Beautiful

    Your use of adjectives to paint an image is simply awesome. This is an aspect of poetry, I feel mine is lacking in. Enjoyed the read very much. Thanks for sharing!


  • tomisb
    October 21, 2007
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    Language excellent. Images enticing and at moments enthralling. Very well done, in many ways.


  • stavykm gold member
    October 19, 2007

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    Beautiful Write

    The Title is great Unimaginable and than the first line
    I love the way your voice soothes and the last line that bind. two hearts. Beautifully romantic poem. Thanks for sharing with me my sweet sister! I enjoyed emercing myself into this poem and it was very sweet! Love Kelle Marei, stavykm


  • 2lullabyhaven
    October 12, 2007

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    Essence of elegance, this write reeks of it, very well done, wow, thanks for sharing lol


  • Melodies
    October 11, 2007

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    Ah, you have more than ten trophies. Okay. I thought that you were surely going to get a lot of trophies, writing like you did here in this beautiful poem!

  • BeautifulFlame
    October 6, 2007
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    Melodies

    So sorry i was caught up in the prompt didnt see the ten tropies or less so i will have to remove mine ...darn and i did better than usual lol !
    So sorry
    Love
    ~lisa~

  • Liquid memories
    October 6, 2007

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    a sweet write, that is unimaginable. very nicly done. you have come a long way and turning out poems like flipping hamburgers, fast! wish you success in this contest, though i believe it did say, it was for poets with 10 trophies or less. might want to check it. thanks for sharing.

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