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Inhaling my life away

Wanting to jump through a trampoline
into a parallel universe,
where everything occured less confusingly
Only to bounce off lightly, worthlessly,
onto the suddenly hard ground
to remind me that reality is where I live.
Inhaling my life away,
as fast as I'm possibly able,
thinking this will help me forget,
not realising, that letting tears ruin my make up
would be much more releasing

Author notes

I still hate the ending

PS: before, i had written here that this was for people that started smoking when they were affected by something. There are different views to it. This will mean something different for different people if they can relate. And no, I don't smoke.

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  • smallgreyrabbit
    December 23, 2007
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    I think this is great..love it.

    I wish I was as clever as you...

  • ladyshame
    November 24, 2007
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    mmmhhhmmm...

    it's been a while since i've been on but obviously...you're still one of my favorite poets...

  • luvdrkchocolate
    October 28, 2007

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    Oh. This is a interesting poem that you have penned in here. I read your author notes and I don't think that I would have guessed at that whole situation if you hadn't told us. But I did get the feeling of someone who needed to escape life and dealing with it for a little while. I felt a need to have some time alone. That's what I got from this. I thought you did a good job of expressing yourself.


  • PerfectTonight
    October 28, 2007

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    I love the imagery in the beginning, I could absolutely relate to it. Wouldn't it be great if big kids could just use the trampoline and imagination to deal with lifes pain? Great job.

  • Ms. morrow
    October 28, 2007

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    GREAT POEM

    Before I read the author notes I thought the "inhaling my life away" line referred to smoking pot. Great poem showing the struggle to cope with "whatever" without harming yourself in the process. I really liked this. Ms. Morrow


    • Ray Von
      October 28, 2007
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      Yeah. That´s what I mean. For different people this poem could mean different things. I added more to m author comments now


  • Schmetterling
    October 10, 2007

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    o dear, i just read through my last comment and it doent really make any sense at all!
    ach, lolness!
    ah well u know wat i meeeean!

    ps. check out the new name... it means 'butterfly'

  • Schmetterling
    October 10, 2007
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    hey

    i really like this poem an the way its writen, i can really relate to it... well the beginning at least....
    dont worry i havent started smoking or anything, its just i can understand what u mean about the last 5 lines- 'Inhaling my life away, as fast as i'm possibly able, thinking this will help me forget.....' and so on. the way i look at it, smoking is just another way of escape, and sometimes we all need that, dont we!
    love you lots
    miss u
    catch
    xxxxxx


  • sunny day
    October 6, 2007

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    Maria, Please if you have started to smoke quit now while you are young my dear niece. We all get brought into a low place in life so many times, it is that trampoline that helps us to bounce back. That is our faith. This is very deep and sad, I wish I had been here when you messaged earlier. I was out running some errands. Release those tears that need to be released, makeup can always be reapplied. You have all my thoughts and prayers with you always. You do have my email address also if you need to send me anything. Love always, from your auntie Joyce xoxoxoxoxo Extra hugs.

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