if you thought we were through then your wrong
because the sex is still going on
what we doin you'll just have to see
as we go ahead into part three
we sittin on the couch, your biting my ear
no one's home, we have nothing to fear
i lick my lips, your hard as a rock
you got the keys to my treasure, now make it unlock
as i kiss you deeply my tounge plays tricks
ans as you enter so does your dick
you poundin me hard,pinning down my hands
baby boy ur takin me to a whole new land
i'm gettin so hot, you blowin my mind
you turn me over and slide in from behind
you grabbin my ass,i clench at the floor
it's hurts like hell but i'm askin for more
on to the kitchen,strawberries and ice
you seek out my pie and go to taste a slice
u take the ice with u and go between my thighs
and more u rise with sounds of deep sighs
down on my back, my legs u spread
but i got another plan instead
u ask do i want it and as i replied
i climb on top and begin to ride
rockin my hips in a pleasuring motion
i continue till i finish with my love potion
as u explode with ur love we both start to rain
i cant wait till we can do this again
Author notes
started on this a couple months ago but i jus never finished it
A contest entry
- EROTICA CONTEST - UNDER 18 ONLY by risewiththesmoke.
669 points, ended November 1, 2007, 11 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Under 18s Erotica by lilacgold.
600 points, ended February 22, 2008, 30 entries
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1450 points, ended March 16, 2008, 41 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - perverts only! by nobodys-girl.
700 points, ended June 3, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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wow! this is completey sexy and jut amazing. i absolutly loved it! thank you so much for entering my contest and best of luck!
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Hot stuff!
This is a fun little fantasy and dirty as hell, well done. Your rhyme scheme was a bit stretched in parts and the rhythm was a bit awkward. I'd also like to see a more complete proofread. Thanks for entering! -
omg!!!! damn girl! I didnt know you be throwing em down like this!! lol!
""i lick my lips, your hard as a rock
you got the keys to my treasure, now make it unlock""
TOTALLY LOVEDDDD THAT PART!!
""you grabbin my ass,i clench at the floor
it's hurts like hell but i'm askin for more""
AND THAT WAS AWESOMEEEEE...
WOW YOUR ONE OF MY FAVORITE POETS!!!
HOT!
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and as always much love and respects
XxLisaJazminexX
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Erotic
this is erotic at it's best. you know how to describe your feelings very well and that is the way of poetry. you have a talent that is unmatched on this site and you should do something with it. keep on writing and i'll keep reading.
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oh wow, great write. love the flow to this. thanks for entering
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Ha-wow.....memories? or soon to be reality? Anyway I liked the poem it had a smooth flow until the end just came to a halt. Do I smell more?
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i dont kno i might make a pt 4 but idnt kno...but hey call me..and thankx
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Ha-wow
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Worked it
You pretty much just tore that poem up...I need a cold shower. -
WOW!! thats umm..... -thoughts not suitable for viewing-
Damn girl, you erotic writer you!!! =]
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this poem is very hot. NICE! -
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THANX ALOT THERE...AND I SEE THAT SURPRISED FACE LOL
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This is hot!!!!
And you callin me a freak? lol lol
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lol yes i am calling u a freak...FREAK! ahem.. mr. home alone pts 1,2,3and 4 LOL
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Don't forget about part 5 (even though I never finished it)
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oh gawd..u need NOT to finish that..but u do need to post part 4 on here
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straight fire
all 3 on point. dat wat it do lil shawty i like all 3of em
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Oh gurl that's what's UP! I liked this line hurr "I lick my lips, your hard as a rock
you got the keys to my treasure, now make it unlock" That's my LINE right thurr. I like your style. I'm glad to have checked you out lil bit.
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thanks alot and yea das gotta be one of my favorite lines too
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you freak!!!!!
haha, I love you Kaila.
Nice work
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lol why thank u
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