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Jack O' Lanterns



Stingy old jack was a clever old chap
who invited the devil out one day.
They were sat in a bar, having a jar,
but then it came time for jack to pay.

Now stingy old jack the crafty old chap
convinced the devil to turn into cash.
As quick as a flash a sixpence arrived,
stingy old jack pocketed it with a smile.

He went home put the sixpence by a cross
preventing the devil of changing back.
Until the day stingy old jack made a pact,
the devil could never have jacks soul back.

Next Halloween old stingy jack died,
he was turned away from the gates of heaven.
And at the gates of hell he then arrived,
but the devil told him to walk on by.

Stingy old jack in the darkness alone
started crying and gave out a moan.
The devil tossed jack a glowing hot coal,
to put in a turnip and find a new home.

Ever since that day, those Jack O'Lanterns
have always been glowing red this way.
For stingy old jack's lonely lost soul
will always be roaming with red hot coals...

 

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Legend has it, That jack O laterns came around because of this old tale!

"Hikaru"

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  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    November 23, 2008

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    A wonderfully penned halloween tale. You had me from the first stanza on this one. The imagery is great and I could really get into it

  • ea silver member
    November 22, 2008

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    Wow, you did youself proud with the bronze on this, I see. I had such a hard time judging my Jack contest that all the finalists were golden to me, so I'm glad this one won here. Congrats!


  • Little Eagle Greeters member
    November 21, 2008
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    Congratulations on the Bronze

  • Little Eagle Greeters member
    November 21, 2008

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    Interesting. I have never heard that. Makes some sense though doesn't it lol.


    Thank you for entering. Good luck in the contest and thank you for following the rules.

    I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment



    Happy Halloween and God Bless
    Tammy


  • Kappa Pyua
    October 31, 2008

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    Wow, is this a real legend? Pretty interesting and thx for following the rules. I like this, good rhyme and invintive.


  • owlish
    October 29, 2008

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    Cool legend! Enjoyed it immensely, loved the rhyme. The rhyme didn't distract at all from the way the story was told. Good luck in the contests!

  • Judith Chandler
    October 16, 2008

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    I love this legend. Poor old Jack, no one wants him but we all love Jack o lanterns so that's something.

    Like the sort of ballad form you've used here, very apropriate.

  • PamelaP
    October 7, 2008

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    Being English I never knew of this story. A great way of telling it children. Good luck with contest.

  • ea silver member
    October 6, 2008
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    Oh, I love how you have illuminated this old story of how a coal was tossed in a turnip to start the tradition we know of as carving jack o' lanterns...

    The internal rhymes in lines like "They were sat in a bar, having a jar" are really delightful- I would love to have a jar of cider with your Jack.


  • filth in th beuty
    January 13, 2008

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    great write, i love the way its based on a real story (or rather pretty much is the story) its excellent,couldnt've done better myself. =)


  • DangerousCereal
    October 18, 2007
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    Thank you for your entry in the contest!! Best of luck!!


  • earthstar
    October 17, 2007

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    I truly like the spin to this tale. It made me smile. I lie stories that are well told. Great for the holiday season. Now I am going to have to do some research to find out why pumpkins exist. Great work. Thanks for sharing this reading delight with me. It really made my day to read it.


  • Swangrnv gold member
    October 12, 2007
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    that's what greed get ya!

    Tell jack he shoulda learned to share! l.o.l.! good piece!


    • Timespell
      October 14, 2007
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      Hahaha

      Yeah, crafty way of a free drink!

      Cheers.

      All the best,

      ~T.S~


  • Tony El Great silver member
    October 7, 2007

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    Jack O'Lantern, is he Irish?
    I wonder if Cracker Jack realizes the name is now racially derogatory?
    Is getting car jacked in New Jack City the same as hearing from welcome wagon?
    Why do people admit to getting jacked up, but won't admit to jacking off?
    Anyway, Happy Halloween, and look out for that pumpkin!


  • TwiztidMaggot
    October 7, 2007

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    This is pretty cool. I like it you did a wonderful job writing it! I love your play on the words and all thta jazz. good luck in the contest! keep up your amazing work!

    Crimson


    • Timespell
      October 10, 2007
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      Thanks

      Thanks for reading glad you liked the story.

      All the best,

      ~T.S~


  • Moonlight Complex
    October 7, 2007

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    Very awesome take on the story behind Jack-o-Lanterns. Your form was great and the poem its self flowed very well. You continue to amaze me.


    • Timespell
      October 7, 2007
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      Thank you

      Thanks a lot for reading and for your comment, much appreciated.

      All the best

      ~T.S~

  • Lady Dragonwyck
    October 6, 2007

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    That is a GREAT revelation. So Jack O'Lanters now have a "real" history. Good luck in this contest.

    Lady D

    • Timespell
      October 6, 2007
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      Thank you Lady D

      Thank you, That is apparently the legend of Jack... Thanks for reading and for your nice comment.

      All the best,

      ~T.S~


  • anaisnais
    October 6, 2007
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    oooh, unusual, I like this take. Well done. Good luck in the contest.


    • Timespell
      October 6, 2007
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      Thank you

      Thanks for reading, Legend has it, that this is why the lanterns are this way.

      All the best,

      ~T.S~

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