We lie below a sapphire sky,
In a land of reverie.
An exquisite isle of simple thought
That beckons our souls to be
Powerless to the recognition
Of a world so brilliantly drawn
By an artist beyond our comprehension
Who lives behind the dawn.
A land as gentle as autumn’s kiss,
Where the wind is a great composer
Of songs that lull us to slumbers bliss
Bringing us ever closer
To a bed that lies in mid September
Where dilemmas now decease,
Under natures canopy
Embraced by utter peace.
Our eyes begin to slowly close
Beneath a starry gleam,
Where we find ourselves floating away
Drifting toward a dream.
A contest entry
- Your Oasis by Dutch Doll.
480 points, ended December 24, 2007, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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beautiful
this poem is wonderful. So discriptive and moving.
I love the way it weaves a sleepy aura pulling you along to the very end - bringing the eyelids down.
good write
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Beautiful
I really liked this poem. It's imagery was totally engrossing. I too share that state of wonder at the sheer beauty of the world and the seasons. At least its beauty before we get to it. I always have trouble placing man in the world. Hey Ho. Thanks for sharing.
To a bed that lies in mid September
Where dilemmas now decease,
Under natures canopy
Embraced by utter peace.
Wonderful word song.
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Loved the poem with its subtle rhymes and lovely imageries. The way you personified the isle of reverie was simply glorious as it led me to a bedchamber outdoors with an elegant canopy and bedposts resounding with love and romance. Beautiful job and thank you so much for visiting my Halloween poem. You were most thoughtful. By the way, welcome to AP and please let me know if I can be of service to you in any way. My best,
Belle
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I forgot a semicolon on the second to final line. Forgive me
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I probably come off as a creepy girl.. but I am so infatuated with your poetry! You have so much talent and I love these visits.
They make my day... This was another indescribable piece. Lovely.
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This is again another beautiful peice of imaginative work. Very romantic and I love it. It is as though you are describing the world as designed by God(artist) as a most beautiful and wonderful place. I love how you have described the wind as a great composer and can hear it's music in the trees around even as I write this. It is a poem of utter peace on planet Earth on a starry night. Your subject, mitre and rhythm are perfect. Well done here Elijah.
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