A fledgling scarred with lifes first battle
An angry shadow upon his wing.
Natures curse, a father's anger,
cast upon an infant boy.
His cries of pain remained unheeded
until they ceased to be
then he knelt in drunken silence
astounded by his act of rage.
He scurried in unriveled haste
to conceal his broken son
beaten to the point of unrecognician.
A life, an opportunity to soar
wrenched from the baby's grasp.
Yet he watches from far above,
and though his earthly wings were smashed
he glides with unending grace
upon his angel wings.
Author notes
Username: Poemdancer
Child abuse is one of the most devestating occurances in our world. They are so helpless, and beaten when they need love. Physical abuse, and verbal abuse. If only we could save children from that, the world would be so much better.
A contest entry
- Contest for the Group " SILENCED ANGELS" Open to all !!!! by PassionsPromise.
700 points, ended October 10, 2007, 7 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Make me cry =] [p/w allowed] by LeilaJayne.
500 points, ended May 10, 2008, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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What you have written in your author notes is so true! I wish i had been saved from it, and i wish i could save people now...this was an amazing poem. Thanks for entering! x
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This is so well penned. I am amazed. i didn't really get that it was child abuse until I finished reading it. The comparisions and metaphors you used fit child abuse to a tee.
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excellent write
very well written. you captured the topic of child abuse very well. i loved the lines
He scurried in unriveled haste
to conceal his broken son
beaten to the point of unrecognician.
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This is such a well written poem with such a heart wrenching story. You have done well here to bring this to light. I cant understand how some people can do that to someone else. I know that they will always try to find reasons for it, but there is none, especially children. congratulations for winning the bronze trophy, it is very much deserved.
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Oh Wow
Wow...... this is like crazy good. My favourite line had to be...
"and though his earthly wings were smashed
he glides with unending grace
upo his angel wings."
That was the perfect ending
This poem is so sad and painful to read, but its so truthful, its almost depressing.... well done you helped carry emotion over to the reader. You earned your trophy.
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This is a very good subject to write about. If you look on my page there is one about the importance of rape. You peiced this poem together very nicely. congradualtions on the wonderful job =]
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A touching, yet beautiful poem. This is really one of my favorites. Its so powerful! You really deserved a trophy, this was beautifully written. Congrats!
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Yet he watches from far above,
and though his earthly wings were smashed
he glides with unending grace
upon his angel wings.
This is really a touching write you are very emotionally awaken to real this beautiful yet a painful truth well done..
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Profound
It really is a sad thing for children to have to endure so much abuse. The adults who do this should be ashamed of themselves. It really is a heartbreaking poem, it pushes the reader into the reality that this stuff is really going on. Great Job, you definitly deserve your trophy! -
Heart breaking
How anyone could do this to a child, let alone their own flesh and blood, is a thing that will always escape me. I would have liked to have read of some reckoning enacted on this so called father, but I guess the reality of it is that no punishment could be fitting to the crime. I found this a well written, but disturbing poem.
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wow, i mean, i have read this one before, but it seems even more powerful now then it did before. Congrats on the bronze and well done.
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BRAVO!! SAd situation, and you penned it well. I actually felt this piece. Maybe the mood i am but this was really really good best wishes to you in the contest.
Tory
p.s I am now a voice, and hopefully through our words and love we can at least reach out, and touch one person and let them know we are here and they are not alone..i have accomplished what i wanted with this contest.
Thanks again for being a voice.
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