As a little girl I remember seeing a mustang for the first time,
With his beauty and such grace I wish he was mine.
Quietly I crawl over the fence knowing he is wild,
I reach out with my small hand and pat him on his head and smiled.
Watching him run across the land wild and free,
There with him I wanted to be.
The crisp breeze blowing through my hair.
Flying free without a care.
The wild mustang so gentle inside,
Open land is where we ride.
Author notes
This actually happened when I was a little girl, I was always told to stay away from him because he was to wild and he hasn't been worked with yet. But I couldn't hold my self back he was so beautiful and free I wanted to join him so I did.
Amber
A contest entry
- Wild Horses - evening kinda quickie by CarolDesjarlais.
600 points, ended October 6, 2007, 6 entries
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I used to feed 2 horses that were kept in a field behind my nanas house~ I used to feed them carrots all the time.
Finally the owner let me ride the tamest one, Vanilla is what I called it; because it was white-lol, I know, so original.
The bugger bucked me off. 
Horses don't like me much, but I do like to watch them. Magnificent animals.
A lovely snapshot of this, thanks.
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Thanks for reading.
Amber
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THANK YOU
thank you for the comments and i really like this piece you done its really discriptive yet short i like it alot thanks .x.
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Thank you so much for reading. This actually happened when I was a little girl, I was always told to stay away from him because he was to wild and he hasn't been worked with yet. But I couldn't hold my self back he was so beautiful and free I wanted to join him so I did.
Amber
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Ah... short? Who cares! The imagery here is wonderfully written. You definitely have a gift, my frined. Take care and keep that ink flowing.
~Donna~
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Thanks for reading this accually happened I was told over and over again to stay away from that horse but I didn't listen.
Amber
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This is a beautiful piece.Horses are amazing creatures I think you have done a nice job woth this thank you for sharing this with me.Much love
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Thank you so much for reading. I was always told never go near that horse because they haven't worked with him yet and I did any way, he didn't even move he just let me pet him and scratch his ears. I thought it was great.
Amber
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Oh, you ahve the narrative down...but there are a couple of things to look at..
“the fence known he is wild,” knowing?
“pat him on his head an smiled.” And?
FREE VERSE
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shewolfnative
Thanks for reading my poem I fixed me errors as well.
Amber
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I think it is great
You have such a vision in your work that makes one feel the breeze sift through their hair -
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Really you liked it? I thought it was to short an needed some fixing to do. Thanks for reading the the comments.
Amber
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