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Feeling Alone

 

 

 

All my life
I have seen my dreams.
Moved my private mountains
and created the view at the top, myself

All my life
I have comforted the lost.
Pointed the way to the next resting place
sometimes pulling and dragging them, to success

Who leads the leader
when he has lost, HIS way.
lost the compass, that served so well
Where do you turn when the voice inside, is silent

Who inspires the poet
when the spirit is falling in.
When the words burn like white acid
and the joy of life seems lost, in my yesterdays

All my life
I have been loved.
In my empty home this night
I wonder... where they all have gone

All my life
I made my own music
played a song in my mind and smiled
Tonight this moment... feeling so very alone

I can not even...  remember the tune



LeeL

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  • siahaan
    February 10
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    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Fl4q2WBCywg&feature=related
    hope you like it


  • poorme
    October 16, 2007
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    Very melancholy,but beautiful.


  • Jalalbad gold member
    October 16, 2007

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    very beautiful. Stop leading and be led for a while, not by woman not by man but by the Greatest of all The Light. It will never fail you. May it flood you with its unconditional pure love- there you will find yourself and sing the univerisal tune of harmony and of peace.
    Smile,
    Judy


  • Aesthete2000 gold member
    October 9, 2007

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    The poet, never truly alone,
    as the lines point out
    in expanding form,
    the words forever a catalyst.

    Soulfully fullfulling.

    Aesthete




    • Endeavor gold member
      October 9, 2007
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      Aesthete


      Thank you for the wonderful thoughts for my words

      Love, Soulfully fullfulling

      Thank you

      Rick


  • snowbird600
    October 7, 2007

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    Feeling Alone

    I think we can all relate to this at one time or another. Perhaps utilize the time to reflect on our lives and look at the positive rather than the negative. We all deserve our own quality time.
    The words are touching though and I'm sure you thought the words out well.
    Thanks for sharing.


    • Endeavor gold member
      October 7, 2007
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      Hi Stef


      I am usally quite happy
      the words were made during a time of sad reflection

      Sometimes is is usefull to reflect where we stand at this moment
      Thank you for the very thoughtfull comment
      Nice to be read by you

      Rick

  • disparate
    October 7, 2007

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    I really enjoyed this.. it's very melodic and definitely touching. I hate feeling alone.. it scares me sometimes, but that's the kid in me. I hope you feel better. This poem was really great to read, personal and very lyrical despite things.


    • Endeavor gold member
      October 7, 2007
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      que sera


      Nice you enjoyed my write
      You can see I hate feeling alone

      That is somthing I need to work on in myself
      Please try another by me, this dark is not my style

      Rick


  • moon2u
    October 6, 2007
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    Melancholy thoughts are always so touching within poetry. This is beautiful.
    moon2u


    • Endeavor gold member
      October 7, 2007
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      Hi Moon


      Sadness can be a great catalist for fine words

      I prefure words of love, as my book indicates

      I thank you

      Rick


  • Sokarjo
    October 6, 2007

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    A very lovely, sad, and stirring write. And so true! I am often the one others run to when they need an ear or a shoulder. And I have often thought these very things when I needed an ear or a shoulder. Most people do not realize that their shoulder sometimes needs a shoulder too. Excellent write; best of luck!


  • ears2hearyou gold member
    October 6, 2007

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    reach out...this delicate poem

    touches those privates places of our souls. I always
    wondered if it is a test from the most high to draw us
    nearer or the beauty of our humanity,a soft spoken inner voice that questions us makes us pause and feel "alone"
    questioning our purpose, questioning all we have done, our achievements, our relationships.And yes,especially for our leaders,
    the mentors in our lives, selfish is a word that comes
    to mind...do I take enough time to just simply enjoy
    a cup of coffee putting my own needs aside, to really
    listen and enjoy them with no purpose "not to learn from or lead them"
    but to take more simple times to just be close period making that my only intention. I know the stats say
    the earth spins really s l o w...their have been so
    many times in my life where it feels like the earth
    is spinning too fast, I need the remote control to
    slow it down, or speed it up.
    The one thing we can not control, damn!
    Exequisite poem. Thankyou for sharing, and by the
    way, we and me really enjoy your
    innervoice. Coffee?
    ears2hearyou
    Kathleen


    • Endeavor gold member
      October 6, 2007
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      Kathleen


      If this is a test, I should have prepared better

      I can be very still, or I can induce a complex interinal debate. My own submittial to depression, sometimes imcumbers, my analitical introspection of personel values.

      In other words, I get bummed and F-up ....lol

      I wish I had Pause, Play, and Reverse (espacally)

      If I had a hundred more years, I would begin tomorrow,
      working on an Electronic Molecular Transporter

      All my friends want one, we are sick of cars and planes

      Enjoy your coffee always

      Rick


  • Midnight Lace
    October 6, 2007

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    I just want to thank you for sharing your delightful words with me and allowing the opportunity to savor each one. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Keep that pen handy dear poet. ~Midnight Lace


  • cherche -d -ame
    October 6, 2007

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    I am not reading a "pissy mood" into this , more a sort of melancholy and introspection maybe?. I am sure that most of us do this at one time or another...it is almost as if it gives us an opportunity then to leave the bad feelings behind and move on [as in a new start]. But in the end , when all is said and done...is it not important that even though there might not be anyone else around...we do know that we can rely on ourselves? As a matter of fact, I personally would not have it any other way. To get inspiration and accolades from someone else is then only an added bonus. But within self is where we can find "us" [and even in lonely it can be a great companion]
    best wishes,
    reenie


  • theskytookflight
    October 6, 2007

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    From the beginning this instantly reminded me of something by Charles Bukowski that hit me quite hard the first time I read it... Question and Answer...

    he sat naked and drunk in a room of summer
    night, running the blade of the knife
    under his fingernails, smiling, thinking
    of all the letters he had received
    telling him that
    the way he lived and wrote about
    that--
    it had kept them going when
    all seemed
    truly
    hopeless.



    putting the blade on the table, he
    flicked it with a finger
    and it whirled
    in a flashing circle
    under the light.



    who the hell is going to save
    me? he
    thought.



    as the knife stopped spinning
    the answer came:
    you're going to have to
    save yourself.



    still smiling,
    a: he lit a
    cigarette
    b: he poured
    another
    drink
    c: gave the blade
    another
    spin.



    Obviously yours is different and I think it is quite strong, the way it is written. Seems a little "whiny" though. There are other ways to appeal to sympathy.


    • Endeavor gold member
      October 6, 2007
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      My Friend


      Thank you for your ornate and thoughtful comment

      Interesting verse I find here

      The end IS very whiny, mostly to be more dermantic

      I appreate you

      Rick

  • Acidanthra
    October 6, 2007

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    Wow Rick, you seemed to speak for me in this write. The lines that touched me the most were "Who inspires the poet when the spirit is falling in. When the words burn like white acid and the joy of life seems lost, in my yesterdays"

    I feel like this so much that I have almost given up writing several times.

    You are a very talented poet and don't you ever give up that gift!


    • Endeavor gold member
      October 6, 2007
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      cerebral


      My friend, what I say is "only" my impression
      for me, I use my writing as a form of a cure.

      When we are the most lost, the most elated with joy,
      thoes are the times when our minds will give the words
      to us, almost as a gift in healing, for our expression.

      Use this to see your way through to, your minds eye
      By making words, we declare and assimilate our beliefs and behavor

      We will become... what we believe

      Think good thoughts
      and vent as needed... lol

      Thank you for reading me

      Rick


  • trista gold member
    October 6, 2007

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    Hi Rick,

    You already know that I don't mind spending a lot of time alone, but what I really hate is being around others and feeling even more alone than if I really was. Today was an awful day for me. Was it for you, too? I know your moods well. Maybe we should have had a joint pity party.

    Okay...the poem itself...
    What happened to punctuation? This is really a wonderful piece of poetry, but I think it would benefit from a few periods. Also this stanza:
    "All my life
    I have been loved
    in my empty home this night
    I wonder... where they all have gone"
    You may want to consider starting a new sentence with "In my empty home this night". As is, it reads as if you've been loved in your empty home all your life, and of course that doesn't make any sense. I do know what you meant, but the first time I read through it really tripped me up. Capping the "I" in "in" would be a quick and easy fix. Anyway, just a suggestion.

    Good luck in the contest. This is one if my favorite writes from you lately...especially since I'm in such a dark mood myself.

    Much love,
    ~J.


    • Endeavor gold member
      October 6, 2007

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      Hi Trista


      I think I fixed the puncutation... lots of dots...........
      I put Caps in where you sugested and a few more as a bonus.

      Thank you for saying this is one of your favorites by me.
      I may make one that tops this

      I have a wonderfull blood sucking dream that needs venting,
      or I may slam the falicies, of the modern sudo-compentent world.

      Thank you for reading my words

      Rick


  • Loveandblessings2u gold member
    October 5, 2007

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    Hey Mr.
    This one made me cry, because I know just how much you hate to be alone. My wish for you is a life long love.

    "All my life
    I made my own music
    played a song in my mind and smiled
    tonight this moment... feeling so very alone

    I can not even... remember the tune."

    I love that part the most, that's the part that touched my heart.
    I think it's because I myself, played a song in my mind and smiled, but you already know that.
    This is a beautiful yet so very sad piece you have penned here Mr. But I and many others can relate.
    You really open up in this piece, which is a good thing to let it all out. An excellent write Mr.

    Loveandblessings2u & yours always
    Your Buddy, Your Friend,
    Your Joy, Your Joyce


    • Endeavor gold member
      October 6, 2007
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      Hi Joyce


      For a person that dislikes being alone
      I sure seem to spend a lot of time alone

      Inspite of the title, it is about more than being alone
      Thank you for saying beautiful, your kind

      Rick


  • michellemybelle gold member
    October 5, 2007

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    This is a powerful write in it's honesty. When we are the one that people turn to it is hard to know it is time to lean on those friends whose hand you have held. YOu have many friends, let them comfort you. I wish you well.
    Michelle


    • Endeavor gold member
      October 5, 2007
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      Michelle


      Thank you for saying powerful

      This is more reflective of my trend, than even today

      I am looking many years back in this write

      Thank you for the three smiles

      Rick


  • irishmidnight
    October 5, 2007
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    Stunning...absolutely stunning!!!


    • Endeavor gold member
      October 5, 2007
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      Hi Irish


      Cool name

      I am Irish myself... McCarthy, Quigly, Moran, O`Casy

      Thank you for saying Stunning

      Rick


      • irishmidnight
        October 5, 2007
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        Rick

        **smiles and laughs** Your very welcome...It left me speachless...lol great write...as I've heard from others, you are a brilliant poet!!


  • aboomer silver member
    October 5, 2007

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    Wonderful! Great depth of wording and emotion in this. And I know many, myself included, can relate to it.

    I love...
    'who leads the leader
    when he has lost HIS way'.....I feel like that a lot lately. I am always the one everyone comes to for help, but at this time I can't seem to even help myself. Just one of those bad slump times.

    Really good! Good luck in the contest.


    • Endeavor gold member
      October 5, 2007
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      Aboomer


      I can relate to you
      I am usally the problem solver

      The good news is, tomorrow may be better
      If it isn`t, I am going to start kicking some ass

      MINE

      I thank you, Rick


  • singingfreedom
    October 5, 2007

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    I am left speechless with this poem. Literally. I don't even have a good comment for it. I loved reading it that much.


    • Endeavor gold member
      October 5, 2007
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      Stumbling


      Sometimes "speachless" is a realy good comment

      I will thank you for the three cute bunnies

      Rick


  • SummerlandRayne gold member
    October 5, 2007

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    Heart wrenching questions Rick. Perhaps you are still touching many and encouraging those that you may not have any knowledge of. This is so deeply felt and a poem that is from a wonderfully magnificent soul. We all wonder things from time to time. I am so glad to have this write...it expresses an age old dilemma so very well. And you have every right to be in a pissy mood once in awhile! Thank you for the entry...it is very deeply felt! Best of luck to you in the contest!

    Love~
    Az


    • Endeavor gold member
      October 5, 2007
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      Hi Sue


      Sorry I am writing dark for your contest
      I think my undiagnosed Bi-Polar is acting up

      If I win the lottery tonight, I may write happy tommrow
      I wonder where I left my ticket this time

      Thank you for feeling my words

      Rick


  • StarEyes
    October 5, 2007

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    What a read! This gets right to the point! and you know, I think many will be able to relate, as I am sure many have felt this way too!

    You did a great job on this one!

    Best of luck in this contest!

    Nyetta


    • Endeavor gold member
      October 5, 2007
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      Hi Nyetta

      I sometimes suffer from depression
      I sometimes regret that I used to be semi-wealthy and retired
      and now I have to work for others, too many days
      I sometimes hate to sleep for fear of my dreams

      Other than that, I am doing OK
      I am just having a micro-self-induced pitty party... lol

      Thank you for reading my words

      Rick

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