In want,
and wonder,
then unsettled,
I wait...
Wish it had been me
but she was there,
and willing.
You learned to love,
as did we.
But that first true
benevolence, has no end.
Passion ascends
from mere thoughts
of his ever-pleasant demeanor.
Flesh tingles
in parachute flare
of savory-slay.
There is beauty
in his nakedness.
From crown
to slender toes,
bald, brown,
and ever so handsome.
God!
Did you ever sculpt
from dirt, and clay
a masterpiece
formed into
the body of man.
His captivating hands
weigh every action,
as my reaction swells.
I am left
to boil over,
spilled-aphrodisia,
always appetite's anthem.
Choices wane
as I willingly fall
into brawny arms,
and melt like snow
in heated elation.
You,
my secret champion,
are but a reflection
of all that I deserve.
Author notes
Visual Art Inspiration from Celticmoon
I am Poetryality
A contest entry
- The Random Rounds - Round 8 by Frodofan.
910 points, ended October 9, 2007, 6 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Your Best Prewrite 3 by Heavenly Angel.
475 points, ended December 12, 2007, 43 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Good gravy, woman!
This is...wow! This is....yeah, like wow!
A FINE sharing this is! And so AWESOMELY done! I LOVE this!
THANK YOU for sharing this into this contest!
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Sheesh Woman! The heck with the way you integrated every aspect of the pic into this with such pleasure. I literally felt I was the women in that moment thinking and feeling all of these expressions of chemistry while captured by his essence!
I think I'll walk away slowly from trying to attempt these writes because yours just burns like fire's heated coals!
Congratulations on the Gold!
Like it was really the trophy! We know that man was really the trophy here
~Joy
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My Tower by poetryality
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Great write!
Bald, Brown and handsome is pretty!
Judy
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And God! Did you ever sculpt from dirt and clay a masterpiece formed into the body and poetry of a woman? Certainly, You did! Lovely piece you have here.
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There are images here that I see for the first time in a sensual poem. It's quite difficult to add new elements when talking about sensual/loving feelings, but you did it in a wonderful way!
What I like the most here is that love shows harder than sensuality, without making of it a complete 'innocent' poem.
Excellent read!
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My Tower by poetryality
Title - 10
Style - 9
Form - 9
Spelling - 10
Captivating -9
Originality - 9
Reaction - 9
Rules - 10
Makes sense - 9
Enjoyable - 9
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You are one of the best sensual writers that I've chosen to read on this site. This poem is alluring. It makes me wish I had a companion, man-friend, husband...all three at once, and one or the other... LOL
What a perfect poem of passion, and what seems to be love that has no bounds. This is bittersweet. I can read between the lines, and will guess that this is a forbidden love that has been allowed. Excellent work as always. Good luck in the contest.
april
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Stellar, exemplary!
Beautiful write, and full of great phrasing of which I'm rather envious. "Savory-slay"... why didn't I come up with that?!
At any rate, this is a delicious piece. I wish you much luck in the contest, although, in my mind, you're a winner already. Truly outstanding work here.
Thank you for sharing!
- Giovanni
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Interesting. I'm a little surprised with the image she gave you though, considering the fact that no adult material is one of the rules. Though it's not quite adult, and your write is purely sensual, it does push it a little...
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Beautiful Grandma.
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Well Versed!
Thanks for sharing your talented pen within here.
All the best within the contest, peace sis!
-Timothy aka poeticweaver~ 
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