Deafening and endless echo
from briskly beating organ,
sweat constantly streaming
over soaked and supple skin,
breath baited as if beguiled,
fingers flinching in fervent waves
of almost nauseating nervous energy,
whispered words of wanting lost amidst shy stutter,
humbling hungry hearts seeking haven
in the arms of dreams deepest desire,
tears are testament to the trauma,
love's light lubricious smile
is inexplicably and inescapably timid,
those that can catch her in flight,
deserve to delight in the dance of the heart.
Author notes
Prompt: how would you define love in 15 lines.
A contest entry
- 24 hr Quickie......Define Love in 15 lines by poet2angels.
475 points, ended October 7, 2007, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Detailed critique welcome
Comments
-
this is so beautiful...it was excellent imagery, and I loved your entire feel to this poem, it spoke to my heart...loved it...thank you for sharing congrats on your HM
-
-
thanks for the wonderful comment, to know others enjoy my work is the true reward along with inspiration in the first place, Lynda's contests have certainly helped me develop into a better poet.
-
-
So beautiful with wonderful imagery and alliteration...
I love the ending lines:
"those that can catch her in flight,
deserve to delight in the dance of the heart."
so beautiful
Lynda
-
This was a lovely poem my friend. Yes love may be elusive and flutter around like the wind but for those who find it the pleasures are endless. Wonderful and heartfelt poem!! Thank you for sharing. Take care, Sandt
Adding your comment:
