I'm curious about my shadow
in the sun it follows me around,
but if I move into the shade
my shadow's nowhere to be found.
Did light create something dark
or is this a part of me,
maybe it's just my negative
something I don't often see.
I suppose it could be my dark side
being separated by the sun,
in the sunshine I do feel much happier
and I do tend to have more fun.
It follows my every movement
just can't make a move alone,
but if I stand still long enough
my shadow will move on it's own.
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i loved the second stanza how it gave a new look and angle to the idea of a shadow.
very creative.
thanks for entering -
Ooh very originally crafted
with nice imagery and
thoughts expressed,
wonderfully penned!
Thanks for entering & best of luck
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thank you for entering! great imagery! and I've never really thought of my shadow like that before, very interesting! great job and good luck!
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loved the imagery.
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I really liked that. And the analogy to our shadow being our darker half was very good. thank you for entering my contest.
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"in the sunshine I do feel much happier
and I do tend to have more fun."
I know exactly how that feels. I am so much more alive when it's nice out and I can be in the sun! thank you for sharing though, I found this very interesting.
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Very cute and creative piece. I love the simply imagery - very beautiful and nicely penned.
Thanks for entering.
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This is a good poem, i really like it, and I too wonder about my shadow sometimes
I really liked this write!
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Peter Pan lost his and dear Wendy stitched it back on again; an operation that always seemed a touch painful to me unlike this piece of whimsy which is far from painful. Really jolly for a dark winterish night.
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This is a good write that has a nice twist at the end. Love the subject... you did a very unqiue take on it! Thanks for sharing.
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Bravo...A beautiful write..I adore shadows of any kind..In my stillness its always my shadow who accompanies me...smiles..
Thank you so much for sharing..
Peace
~A~
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never thought about my shadow in this fashion before, and i really like the line, "did the light create something dark," it made me think about all the sorrows life creates. this was a very whimsical, yet very deep poem. you did a very good job at that.
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Clever and witty ,it makes one think
enjoyed this poem very much
thank you for searing
Nick
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a wonderful poem about your shadow, I like it! my shadow seems to do just the same as yours....
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hemmm i like it mysterous ian the ending nice
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Yeah the ending is great!Thanks for entering my contest! Good luck
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O Wow. The ending was cute. Nice Write.
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