Lilac wax melts upon
glass hands; scorned
Invisible scruple
flowing in chilled currents,
like pins and needles that
dance in scattered patterns.
Garnets of lavender
fall in disarray,
petals avow slander,
bringing sodden tears to
rain down a face so pale.
Pews saturated in
stormy waters and ribbons
are empty, heavy in silence.
Silence... it hails harder
then any cyclone, and this day
has left me to cry
alone.
Author notes
This is about a dream I had last night where I was left alone at the alter and it started raining in the church, lavender lily petals fell down around me and I cried alone on my wedding day.
What a nightmare.
A contest entry
- . by Aurora Ceres.
700 points, ended November 1, 2007, 75 entries
Honorable mention
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That surely would be a nightmare wedding.
It's truly amazing how our dreams can speak to us through poetry. This is truly an evocative piece, filled with raw emotion. Every stanza is filled with vivid imagery. Your pen so eloquently brought your tragic dream to life. Bravo on a beautiful piece!!
I think this would probably be any bride's worst nightmare. Knight70
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oh! That is such a sad dream to have! This is very well-written!
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Dreaming makes for a great past time
but try to keep them happy dreams! I was being chased by murderers the other night... me running on foot and they in a helicopter. Cornered myself in a chainlink court yard... never so happy to wake up!
Anyhoo, nice poetic translation of your midnight mind movies. I like a girl who can spell.
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soooooooooo goood. it was almost as if i was there, in a pew watching your nightmare. i felt your pain, and it pained me that i couldnt help out.
Keep on truck'n -
more or less justyour nerves.first time reading you
and i enjoy the way you pen your dreams to beableto capture it with such amazing word Bravo
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What a very sad,. yet poetic dream you had ame.
Put that all out of your mind. You and Zacky are going to wed and live happily ever after 
mwahhhhhhhhhhhhh No worries 
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this was featured. No fairss.
Oh, wow. I've never read your poetry before Kerri, I like it. It's so purdy and I just love lilies. But it's only a nightmare, they never come true(only for a select few actually). Sometimes whatevers going on in your life does effect you mentally and you start having these kinds of dreams about it.
Keep up the wonderful poetry my dear Salty ^-^
-Reign
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The word 'aww' comes to mind when I read this poem, I've had a dream similar to this, though never could I have presented it in such a fine way. I loved the visual details you gave.
"Silence... it hails harder
then any cyclone, and this day
has left me to cry
alone."
I think that was my favorite line, maybe because I have been so alone lately, that my connection was sparked with it, the drowning silence in a cyclone of tears... it's a wonderful piece!!! keep up the good job!!
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Wow, very sad dream hun. Nightmare is right. I loved the words you picked to describe your dream, this was a very sad poem, you done a great job, keep up the good work.
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I think you did a wonderful job writing this, especially from true, pure emotions that nightmares can leave us with through the next day. I think the only constructive criticism that I can give is: If this is a free verse poem, then in the third stanza, there is some rhyme. I wasn't sure if that was done purposely or not. Other than that, this piece was magnificently written!
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It's not on purpose
I actually didn't notice that
but it isn't meant to rhyme,
it's just there lol
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