A raindrop on virgin desert
Reflections inside bright eyes
A heavy beating without the scars
Handsome feeling within her sighs
In foreign land awaits new sun
For proximal trip into heated night
Where in morning dances do live
Memories of romance’s flight
A teardrop over silenced dirt
Trajections of what was then
A chance forgone but forever
Truth chaste leaves trace again
At the heart of tranquility,
In the opened hand...
With love’s signature ability
06/10/07
A contest entry
- 24 hr Quickie......Define Love in 15 lines by poet2angels.
475 points, ended October 7, 2007, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Love comes in all Ages by Loveandblessings2u.
950 points, ended November 12, 2007, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Wow. This is really beautiful. It stirs up all sorts of images and feelings inside when you read it. I like that. lol. xD Great job. Thanks for entering, keep writing!
Cj
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There is something about the way you have written here, that makes me feel as if I never actually knew love the way I should know it.
What a great way you have found to write about these feelings, using some good metaphors and images with it.
Thank you for entering this contest, I wish you the best of luck!
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hmmm... I believe love is so very specific to the persons involved, broad in scope and almost too elusive to define. This is what I've most recently felt love to be, hence the write! Thank u 4 your sincere comment... much appreciated <3 Alex
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"A heavy beating without the scars
Handsome feeling within her sighs"
I love those lines.
You made love seem so magical.
An even deeper feeling that
anyone has ever known.
Great write.
Thanks for entering my contest and good luck.
Loveandblessings2u & yours always
Joyce
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Because love IS magical
& deeper than I ever expected! As for those two lines (along with the last two) are the parts of this poem that really mean the most to me~
Thank u 4 your sweet comment
<3 Alex
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This was such a good description of love. Great job!
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A very lovely and lyrical poem, and a beautiful expression of love and romance. A delight to read.
Keep up the wonderful works.
(p.s. I wanted to read your poems, because my wife is from Thailand, as I understand you are as well.)
All the best,
David Michaels
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I was reading it and then had to go again and again. Very nice expressed feelings about love, romance, sighs...also I like so simple but nice rhyme pattern. Congratulations for this nice shiny trophy.
~Sonja~
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Ooo this is a wonderful piece, I am all for believing that you can't definre Love but you have done an excellent job. Congrats on the Honourable Mention, you have some intricately beautiful lines in this piece x take care x
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Fantastic, beautiful piece. Congrats on the h.m.
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cool u know Lynda? hmm i don't yet... but will check her stuff out soon too... thank u 4 the comment!
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Oh, you won HM in this contest? That is great, Lynda is a friend of mine...and this poem is beautiful, wonderful imagery, congrats!
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Fantastic and graphic in its entirety
love the image with the poem
J x
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^^thnku Julie~
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I love this one
Very good girl. Glad to see you're still posting. This one is a good one I really liked it.
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thanx Lynn!
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Beautifully written on a subject dear to my heart; love. It is a precious thing and even bliss when it can be shared between two people. Love knows pain for that's how one knows it is true love. But love also knows the beating of a heart that can satisfy the soul for a lifetime to be enjoyed by lovers. Congrats on the Honorable Mention.
Ted E
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Yup very true! Thanx 4 the comment (naked) TedE...
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It was my absolute pleasure to read this fine art and comment
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thanx 4 the prompt & HM... wouldn't have penned this w/out u... but very glad i did!
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Soft, lovely and a great ending...Wonderful imagery!
Lynda
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