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*~ Ivory Carousel of Purity Planted ~*

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A single seed imbedded life within hallowed soil
for mulch to magnify,  four elements to toil.
Elegance entranced with divine interventions;
Goddesses gifted,  flaunt fair skinned reflections.

Sweetest fruits picked,  peeled of its nutrients
by curious hands clasped, versed Ten Commandments.
Trees swayed,  swung its octopus like tentacles
around those in need who appeared as lost souls.

Their barefeet battled blades which quietly protruded,
emerald pricked pain,  band-aid of petals concluded.
Nature nurtured with wings extended overhead
and below became a stage to dance with the dead.

Voices shrouded in secrecy, 'neath guise of glass veils.
Virtuous forms framed a masterpiece for all males.
Cherubs chanted limericks,  arrows spun circles~
captured purity's chemistry within hourglass of miracles.



 

Author notes

Username: Desire

Picture Inspiration:
http://courses.educ.ksu.edu/EDETC886/GraphicDesign/modules/mod6/botticelli.jpg

For some reason...when I viewed the picture~
I kept seeing seeds planted
(could be spiritual-emotional-physical)
and celebration of blessings with women dancing
(purity present)
hearing a Yanni or Enya song in the background...
lol

but also the curiosity of what the fruit
held within the skin...
and the cherub releasing arrows of Love
to be shared amongst them...
Hopefully this makes sense...
it did when I wrote it...lol

also mentioned octopus for bonus...

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  • wolfspiritguide gold member
    October 10, 2007

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    this is really beautiful. i am so sorry i havn't been on line enough to comment properly but know i love your writes and look forward to them when i can read them. great job and happy hunting...(i have no idea why i said that lol) and thank for the gratz on my new puppy!


  • Celticmoon
    October 8, 2007

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    *~ Ivory Carousel of Purity Planted ~* by Desire


    Title - 8
    Style - 9
    Form - 9
    Spelling - 10
    Captivating - 8
    Originality - 9
    Reaction - 8
    Rules - 10
    Makes sense - 7
    Enjoyable - 8

    total: 86


  • Frodofan silver member
    October 7, 2007

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    Title - 7
    Style - 8
    Form - 9
    Spelling - 10
    Captivating - 6
    Originality - 10
    Reaction - 7
    Rules - 10*
    Makes sense - 10
    Enjoyable - 7

    10 point bonus

    total: 94

  • JM Kenyon silver member
    October 6, 2007

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    *~ Ivory Carousel of Purity Planted ~* by Desire
    Title - 8
    Style - 8
    Form - 8
    Spelling - 10
    Captivating - 8
    Originality - 9
    Reaction - 8
    Rules - 10
    Makes sense - 9
    Enjoyable - 8

    total: 86


  • Frodofan silver member
    October 6, 2007
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    Good work and good luck.


  • Puppydog gold member
    October 6, 2007

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    AH, SO BEAUTIFUL!!!!

    What a beautiful picture you paint with these words! This is a place where I would like to be.


  • penman gold member
    October 5, 2007

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    Excellent

    Oh my this was so powerful darling. Your words flow with such an exquisited melodious quality. And the images are truly masterful. Best of luck in the challenge.


  • Amera gold member
    October 5, 2007

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    I'm so happy to read your work today; you are such an inspiration and your poetry is always written with so much class. This quatrain is an amazing take on the picture provided. Youd vocabulary is so descriptive and it flows so smoothly. Wonderful!

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • Poetic-Theorem gold member
    October 5, 2007

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    Brilliant

    You take on the pic promt is amazing. Such vivid imagination combined with an excellent choice of words. This is a metaphoric masterpiece

    "Sweetest fruits picked, peeled of its nutrients
    by curious hands clasped, versed Ten Commandments.
    Trees swayed, swung its octopus like tentacles
    around those in need who appeared as lost souls...

    Voices shrouded in secrecy, 'neath guise of glass veils.
    Virtuous forms framed a masterpiece for all males.
    Cherubs chanted limericks, arrows spun circles~
    captured purity's chemistry within hourglass of miracles."

    Breath-taking...BRAVO!!!!!!!!!
    WELL PENNED!
    I wish you the very best in the contest!
    David




  • HaleyMary
    October 5, 2007

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    Beautiful write. Your talent for poetry is just amazing.
    This poem had a wonderful flow and you really seemed to take a lot from the picture and put it into the poem. Just a wonderful write. Best of luck in the contest.


  • StarEyes
    October 5, 2007

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    Wow! Girl what a read this one is! Talk about talent! This is beyond amazing!!! I love it!!!!

    Best of luck in this contest!!!!

    and much love

    Nettie


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    October 5, 2007

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    I think this is most EXCELLENT, sweetie! Wow!
    Your fine poetic talents just shine like a beacon within every line of this verse!
    Wishing you the best in your challenge, hon...BRAVO!!!

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