It's killing me, this constant strain,
being pulled from all directions.
I'm stuck making all these mistakes
with no eraser for corrections.
Do this, not that, it's all the same,
just an army of decisions.
But this army's hungry and
I'm running low on provisions.
Where do I stand ending each day
taking one forward and two back?
It builds and compounds until
I feel like I may crack.
I need an anchor to bring me ashore,
dock me into solace secure.
Then I can focus, grab hold my bearings,
but until then I am unsure...
The ravings of a confused adolescent.
Author notes
I submit this on the topic of confusion.
Thank you.
A contest entry
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800 points, ended October 12, 2007, 16 entries
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I love it
this poem has great expression and details wish I was good like you
Marie
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this is awesome dude
my fav line is *I need an anchor to bring me ashore,*
great fucking write
I like it a lot
*high five*
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it looks like your the onky one on my family that is writting every one else is in sep.
very well done though- your poetry keeps on getting better and better
dXd -
excellent write, I especially love that last stanza,
"I need an anchor to bring me ashore,
dock me in solace secure"
Great wording and and consistent rhyme, flows well. xxx
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wow
this is an amazing write,every stanza was very well written with deep description; that describes the emotion of confusion very well, with a unique and personal flare! Outstanding write! -
YEA!
Nice flow nice rhyme. very ....sensual? is that a word? best so far i think -
This is Amazing!!!
I love this poem. I get the whole meaning. I loved the flow and the rhymning. I just basically love the entire write. You are an awsome writer.
♥X♥
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Aww. This is awesome. I know how you feel. It sucks, right? Haha.
This has really great rhyming in it. It flows great!!
Amazing imagery! I want to say that the second stanza is my favorite until I reread the rest, and then I don't know. Haha. It's all great! Good job!!
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This is pure excellence!
I see the amazing [yea right, hahah, jks] nick coming back with writing
Do this, not that, it's all the same,
just an army of decisions.
But this army's hungry and
I'm running low on provisions.
I think that that is the best stanza. You know what I really adore? The usage of provisions because it isn't a common word and well, I'm attracted to things like that. Especially the first line of that very same stanza which shows the amount of decisions going through their head. And an army of decision gives some excelent vague-ish but clear image. If I make any sense that is.
SO now you see why I love that stanza. The poem on a whole is great.
NeveR ♥
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