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Wild, bitter winds,

Rip at my hair...

Tear at my clothes.

As I walk along the lane...

Searching for the soul i've lost.

Face lifted to the ash grey clouds.

The flakes fall silently on my face..

As angel kisses raining from above.

My body is frigid.

But my heart is warm.

I know that I'm getting closer to you...

The pain i've felt inside,

For so very many years,

Is ebbing away...

Slowly seeping into the abyss.

So I know,

That my soul is somewhere near.

And you hold it...

Like glass,

In hands strong as steel..

But gentle as rose bud in early spring.

I search for you.

My eyes pleading to lock with yours.

The barren trees hide you somewhere amongst them...

Hindering my veiw and leaving me frustrated.

The wind screams through the trees...

Blocking out every other sound

So I must use whats left of my heart,

To call to yours.

To again find my soul...

So safe in your hands.

But alas,

My feet are numb,

My body is screaming out in pain.

My mind is faltering against the cold.

I know I must find you soon...

Or all is lost..

Answer my calls, My Lover

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  • Knight70 silver member
    October 19, 2007

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    Loaded with emotion.....

    Wild, bitter winds,

    Rip at my hair...

    Tear at my clothes.

    As I walk along the lane...

    Searching for the soul i've lost.

    Face lifted to the ash grey clouds.

    The flakes fall silently on my face..

    As angel kisses raining from above.

    My body is frigid.

    But my heart is warm.



    It takes a special poet who can write like this. I was captured by the imagery in this piece, as it reminded me of lost love. Don



  • BluArtistEyes
    October 6, 2007

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    Wow Amazing

    I was captivated by this wonderful poem, it's like being transported to another world.... Very well written with outstanding imagery.... I wish you luck with the contest.... this is a beautiful poem...


    • irishmidnight
      October 8, 2007
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      BottleOfMemories

      Thanks my dear...Your comments mean the world to me!!! **hugs**


  • Sokarjo
    October 6, 2007

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    Wow. How fantastic! You've set the mood very well and the whole thing just catches me up and won't let go. Incredible! Best of luck!


  • Theroseislovely
    October 6, 2007

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    Longing, haunting, searching, that makes this poem great. You woven a tapestry of hope and longing, search and strength renewed. Well done, and goog luck to you!


  • aboomer silver member
    October 6, 2007
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    mouse 'slid over'...missed one..lol

  • aboomer silver member
    October 6, 2007

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    Beautiful wording and full of emotion and images. Reads nicely.
    Seeking out the 'elusive, just out of reach' love seems to be something that many feel and you have done well at describing this.
    Nice job.
    Good luck in the contest.


    • irishmidnight
      October 6, 2007
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      ABOOMER

      **grins** thanks hun!! I love the way you described it all...lol


  • Kindredblood
    October 6, 2007

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    your words seem to plead or beg, not in a bad way, just how i felt from the overall view, like you are reaching for someting that remains elusively out of reach, like in a dream where you are running away or to something and it feel like you are running in slow mo, dont know if you have ever experienced a dream as such.
    The emotions within each line seem raw and naked, unrehearsed, and to be honest, your poetry just flows with natural honest emotions.
    I have enjoyed reading your poems, and how they made me feel, though they will never change the way I view life, at least they have allowed me a look into the mind a beautiful poetic mind as your self, thank you for sharing such deep words, and I hope life for you will hold many a wonderful surprise, and peace be with you always.


    • irishmidnight
      October 6, 2007
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      kindredblood

      You pretty much hit it dead on sweetheart...**grins** thanks so much for the comment!!!


  • Endeavor gold member
    October 5, 2007

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    Very Good


    My body is screaming out in pain.
    My mind is faltering against the cold.
    I know I must find you soon...
    Or all is lost..
    Answer my calls, My Lover

    Wonderfull closing words
    This verse showes you gift well

    I have made words like this before
    It is a troubling place to be

    Rick

  • near1202apocalypse
    October 5, 2007
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    very good

    this is a very inspiring love poem! it feels as though your actually speaking to me. I love it!


    • irishmidnight
      October 6, 2007
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      near1202apocalyse

      Love your comments my love...as always...**blushes and hugs**


  • azlyn gold member
    October 5, 2007

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    Beautiful!!! Love this...speaks of passion and deepest desire.{things I adore!} Love the pic...winter is my season! Love the icy cold...thank you so much for the entry! Best of luck my friend!

    Love~
    Az


    • irishmidnight
      October 5, 2007
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      Azlyn

      **grins** thank you...winter and fall are my favorite times of year...

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