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Matthew 7

Am I one with the flowers and the trees;
do I have the power, within my hand?
Am I in control, when I’m on my knees
and without a doubt do I understand?

There's a constant pool that flows within me
as I fall on my knees with my request.
Gives rise to a spirit that all may see,
knowing the changes will be for the best.

The joy and the bliss I’ve had since my youth
still dwell within me,  when I kneel to pray.
I will show you how I have learned the truth
as my dreams come true nearly ev'ry every day.

Knock on the door it will open to you,
Believe in yourself and dreams will come true.

 

 

 

Author notes

English sonnet

This was written for a contest but the judge wanted me to destroy the poem by putting the quote above the poem in the poem text box. I removed it even though I used two options and doubled the word bank. Poetry is more importiant than the whim of a judge that dosen't understand the art.

 

Matthew 7:7,8

7. Ask, and it shall be given you; seek, and ye shall find; knock, and it shall be opened unto you:
8. For every one that asketh receiveth; and he that seeketh findeth; and to him that knocketh it shall be opened.


Art work by:   MichalGiedrojc

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  • Eusebius
    October 8, 2007

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    bravo...

    Ah, once again a finely crafted sonnet from your deft poetic hand! Very excellent, indeed! bravo... bravo... bravo...


  • second-born
    October 8, 2007

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    This is such an astounding poem...the Bible verse came out to life!!! Moreover, I salute you for standing what you believe is right...you are truly a dedicated poet!!! God bless you always...


  • Swan song gold member
    October 8, 2007

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    This is very inspirational. It would go good at church
    for young teens. It works poetically as well.


  • captain howdy
    October 7, 2007
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    I am glad you didn't change this! It is beautiful!


  • ellipsist
    October 7, 2007

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    agreed! this is beauitful the way it is

    I am glad that this was left as you composed it... I love the questioning tone and resounding faith both revealed so effortlessly and naturally within this piece...


  • Dalaney gold member
    October 7, 2007

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    gasp! A judge wanted you to do what??
    Amera, stand by your poetry always...the
    very idea of someone wanting to mess with
    your poetry makes me want to get in touch
    with my old friend, Mario, from Brooklyn...
    he has a particular love for baseball bats
    and kneecaps...

    Love, Lane


  • Marctheman
    October 6, 2007

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    Wow, the judge want you to destroy search a beautiful creation, wow, well i am glad you follow your heart like always, that's the reason why i'm not a big fan of the contest in here, they just don't realize you can not control what a poet feel and write.


  • micol
    October 6, 2007

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    Beautifully done. In sonnets, sometimes the later lines and stanzas begin to falter, as if the creative impulse controlled the initial stanza, then lost its fervor as the poem's demands increased. This one doesn't. Each line/stanza is as controlled as if it were the first inspiration for the piece and all else came afterward.

    One small suggestion: Should it be "dwell" since the dual subject for the verb is "joy and bliss"?

    I appreciate your comments as well. Contests are fun, but distinctly less so when the judge ceases judging and begins writing the poem he or she wishes we had submitted. Or recomending superfluous backgrounds when the words should be allowed to speak for themselves.

    Anyway, well done and congratulations.


  • PerVirtuous
    October 5, 2007

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    I will give you many bunnies and kisses. Forget the judge. It wins my contest.


  • JohnnyD gold member
    October 5, 2007

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    Cubbie, you become more interesting to me each week it seems. this piece was really insightful.




    Dad


  • mysticstorm gold member
    October 5, 2007

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    A beautiful work of art. You write with such skill and talent. A wonderful take on the verse. Filled with such a sense of hope and inspiration. One most always believe in themselves in order to be whole.
    Brillant!

    b : :


  • HaleyMary
    October 5, 2007

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    This is beautiful. I loved the last two lines the best. It was very inspirational and it makes me think of as long as we believe in ourselves, anything is possible in life. Keep up the great work.


  • sunny day
    October 5, 2007

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    Bravo!!! Bravo!!! Bravo!!!

    Amera, You not only carried an important message in your poem, your author notes spoke a 1000 words. We can't ruin art on the whim of judges. This sonnet was filled with spirituality and hope. Believing in yourself is the most important factor and that was a knockout ending for this brilliant write. Thank you for sharing your gift with us once again. This left me with such a strong feeling of inner peace. Love you my friend, Joyce


    • Amera gold member
      October 5, 2007

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      Thanks so much Joyce for your comment and support. I'll put whatever they want in the notes but no one dictates to me what goes with my poem.


  • liquidmindforever
    October 5, 2007

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    Dear Poet,
    Thank you for entering IS THERE A GOD & WHAT IS IT
    contest.
    Please, put your quote above your poem as stated
    under opt. 5 and put the name of the option next to the opt. #.
    You have used two options while asked to select one
    so you will need to place two options names in author's notes and remember the quote above your poem.
    Thank you. Advise me by im when this is complete with title and name of contest and I will read and comment on your entry.
    lol
    liquid


    • Amera gold member
      October 5, 2007
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      I apologize for wasting your time; thank you for reading my poem.

      Love,
      Amera♥


  • jo-el
    October 5, 2007

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    ah..very cool. when prayer is directed out especially for the good of others, there's no question..somethin in the soul connects to a oneness. well the truth is the connection is there. we just don't recognize it cause our faith is often so weak. we actually feel the connection when our love is expressed unselfishly for the well being of those we care for. the connection is felt even stronger if the prayers happen to be offered at the same time by many directed towards one purpose. i love how you end this. believe in yourself. that is the key. excellent


  • capricornpoet
    October 5, 2007

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    soothing

    Words of prayers, soothing after the sea's have stirred, just when I needed words of gentleness to flee into....lovely sonnet that catches the soul in a peaceful breeze...inspiring.


  • Tercil gold member
    October 5, 2007

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    What a lovely prayer, so much restfulness in it, it could be actually read in church I feel, to set examples to the way people live. So beautiful!

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