Blackness curls and sways through a grey fog
You sense my love in the darkness above
You spread your arms and love the wind
Cawing the language of death, the air thickends
We appear together in one shadow
Resting from flight on my shoulder
The moon so full in its continuous circle
Loves true form appears in this visious curse
Black feathers fade to pale white flesh
Wings spread out as arms reform to hold again
Grab me, pull me, life me high
Kiss me, touch me, love me again
Do it now before the moon leaves this night
Always my familiar except on this night.
Comments
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i think the contrast between light and obscurity is well presented in the poem. the light from the 'luna' creates unusual shadows which correspond to the unusual feelings presented. Although termed 'love', the feeling presented is a strange kind of love which does not evoke positive sentiments. about the last line, i think it stands out of the poem, as it is not woved into the fabrics of the rest. the title is in contrast with the rest of the poem, and this striking peculiarity corresponds to the usage of imagery in the poem. well done!
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An enjoyable piece of poetry, there is some good dark imagery here that is intermingled with love, a good poem.
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talk about making my heart melt!! Thats a GREAT poem!! Check out my poems
they're not as good as yours are but ther alright
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I really like the ending of this poem... it was beautifully done... this is a wonderfully dark poem and I enjoyed the story of it all... brilliantly done, I really enjoyed finding this piece
Keep writing
Polly
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