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Fantasy

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Lady of a thousand dreams
you entered my life, on a rainbow it seems.
You picked up the pieces, of this broken man
and helped him learn, to love again.

Woman of a thousand delights
won't you share my bed tonight
and together we'll reach, unreachable heights
with our bodies moist, in the heat of the night.

My little girl, I cant deny
you caught my love, when you first caught my eye.
So tears of joy, forever will I cry
till I've filled all the oceans, and clouds in the sky.

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  • Joshuavk
    1 day ago
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    This is sweet, and I bet she liked it =)
    Rhyming is well done, flow is reasonable, the difference in syllabels is rather large, between the individual lines.
    Still, this warmed me =)

    Cheers, Joshua.


  • feyfalen
    2 days ago
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    nice!

    Very warm. I like it.


  • Diminished Capacity gold member
    July 14

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    This is so sweet, what a lucky woman she must be to have this beautiful poem written for her. Thank you so much for such a wonderful entry.


  • nobodys-girl
    June 22

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    oh this is so sweet and so cute! i just loved it! thank you so much for entering my contest and best of luck!


  • Beyond Broken
    August 23, 2008
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    this was very pretty. great work.


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    July 16, 2008

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    Thank you for your entry in our contest. A lovely romantic poem with an unusual rhyme scheme, although the flow of the lines caused us to stumble on reading.
    Please join us in future contests...Sue and Jeff


  • Pandorea
    July 11, 2008
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    oh. how wonderfully romantic *sigh* wish i could do that...

    thanks for entering.


  • R S Adams Jr silver member
    June 29, 2008

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    wonderfully romantic

    I like the rhythm and the rhyme of your poem. It is vivid in its feeling. The woman of the poem must be very pleased with it.


  • darlintlc silver member
    May 21, 2008

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    Very nicely done!!

    "Lady of a thousand dreams
    You entered my life, on a rainbow it seems"

    very romantic!
    thanks for entering
    darlintlc


  • SageyBaby
    April 29, 2008

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    This is such an amazing sweet piece of poetry we got here and the rhyming was amazing. Good luck in the contest x


  • ForeverLastingComa
    April 26, 2008

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    aww this is really sweet!..i loved the rhyming and flow of this poem this was an awsome write! =D I especially liked these lines,

    "My little girl I cant deny
    You caught my love, when you first caught my eye
    So tears of joy, forever will I cry
    Till I've filled all the oceans, and clouds in the sky"

    Who ever you write this to must be blessed, thank you for entering and good luck =)

    ~*ForeverLastingComa aka Leesha*~


  • BarefootSoul
    April 17, 2008

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    this is precious, so much thought and passion written within. Good rhythm and flow too. I am sure the woman of your dreams was immensely touched in reading this poem. Thank you for entering this

  • piccola silver member
    April 1, 2008

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    Oh I love this ... it's short but wonderful. I have tears of happiness in my eyes from the feelings it brings. Isn't it wonderful being a poet and being able to touch hearts like this? thank you for entering


  • Misery into Melody
    December 4, 2007

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    I'm not really into erotica. (Makes me feel funny in the pants LOL) but this is really sweet, not very descriptive which is a total bonus towards you, plus its got nice rhyming scheme and all that.
    Good luck in LE CONTEST!


  • Entwining Beauty
    November 25, 2007
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    amazingly written good luck


  • leslielovesthomas
    November 2, 2007
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    loved it! thank you for entering and good luck!

    leslie


  • Lady Eventide
    October 6, 2007

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    Wow. The rhyme really worked with this piece, but what I liked the most was the flow...sort of like "twinkle, twinkle, little star" in a few places. A very sensual poem. Good job.

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