I have left you
but I'm not far
I promise you everything will be ok
just look up and you will see me glowing there for you
I will never leave your side
as long as there is night that comes after day
The moon he is now my friend
He helps me on these lonely nights
I wish you could be here by my side
but untill then never let my light die
When you want to think of me just close your eyes
I will always be right here
I promise you dear I'm not going anywhere
I'm just a little further away
I will shine for you all night threw
Just keep wishing upon me
and don't let your dreams fade away
I will always be your wishing star
A contest entry
- Give Twinkling Stars a Voice [Open to all ages] by Poetic-Theorem.
500 points, ended October 13, 2007, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This poem is a wonderful poem! "I will always be your wishing star" and "I will sine for you all night through" reminds me of the anime "full moon o sagashite"
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Very sweet
Nicely done here once again...and mice to se one of yours not dealing with abuse...and hope this isnt for "him", for he doesnt deserve the kindness thatl ies in you,
Evan -
Thank you for your sparkling entry =]
G'day lizwicker
This is a beautifully tender write
I like the flow, though it seems a little forced it is still lovely
Just one thing:
"I will shine for you all night threw"
'threw' should be 'through'
Best of luck in our contest
Stay safe
~Manda ♥
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SWEET!!!!!!!
This is a beautiful write If I was a star with a loving heart...I would say the elegant words that you wrote in your poem;
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When you want to think of me just close your eyes
I will always be right here
I promise you dear I'm not going anywhere
I'm just a little further away
I will shine for you all night threw
Just keep wishing upon me
and don't let your dreams fade away
I will always be your wishing star"
TRANQUILITY LOOKING DOWN TO US!
Thank you for your entry and I wish you the very best in the contest!
David
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nice...i like it...great work
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awww these are sweet pieces im reading in this contest.
this is no excpetion this one shines ever so bright.
best wishes to you my friend.
Tory
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