As I dress in my suit of amour
choose the mask of the day
close the door, shut all internal windows.
Shinning on the outside,
laying dormant on the inside.
Wrapped up tight in octopus arms,
entwined in the years.
I can see a pattern appear.
Enduring the enemy has taken it's toll,
as the pain grows I feel the life being stripped.
Pointless anger poisons me, threatens me,
memories still haunt with the voided voices I hear.
But somewhere in-between
combined in all I do
lays beautifully colored blessings.
Each day of hiding is only taking away,
blinding the real true blue me.
Author notes
blondone
My prompt is Don and Doff
which I wrote for don as I put on my masks
and doff what it has taken away from me
I incorporated the word Octopus
A contest entry
- The Random Rounds - Round 8 by Frodofan.
910 points, ended October 9, 2007, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
1 - 9 of 9
-
i really liked this it was deeply moving.
-
I like this it was a good read and very personal
was lost till i read the authors notes then the poem came together very well and upon reading again I saw beauty.
-
woooosh.. "Wrapped up tight in octopus arms,
Now there you go sometimes life seems so full of arms
pulling us every which way, I liked how this told the tale of life yet showed somewhere in those fleeting arms we can and will find the hidden beauty life has to hold, Once again some amazing work of potery and
feeling,
Love and Light
Frozentearz -
Somewhere Between by bondone
Title - 8
Style - 7
Form - 7
Spelling - 10
Captivating - 7
Originality - 7
Reaction - 8
Rules - 10
Makes sense - 8
Enjoyable - 8
total: 80
-
Title - 8
Style - 7
Form - 7
Spelling - 10
Captivating - 8
Originality - 8
Reaction - 8
Rules - 10*
Makes sense - 8
Enjoyable - 7
10point bonus
total: 91
-
Somewhere Between by bondone
Title - 7
Style - 7
Form - 7
Spelling - 10
Captivating - 7
Originality - 7
Reaction - 7
Rules - 10
Makes sense - 8
Enjoyable - 7
total: 77
-
Very good writting, nice job of usisng the prompt with meaning.
-
Magnificent!!
Love this one busy bee and You incorporated octopus too
Yay!!!
Wow~ what a prompt You got
Holy Mackerel
Love these lines:
Pointless anger poisons me, threatens me,
memories still haunt with the voided voices I hear.
So true!!
I tell myself...the same thing
Pointless anger poisons me~~~
Thank You for sharing this Sweet One!
Many blessings to You in the contest
Best wishes too
and much love~ Desire~*~
-
Good work, especially with incorporating "octopus."
Good luck!
Adding your comment:
1 - 9 of 9
