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Eternal

What is left when the sky disbands;
And the oceans burn for eternity
When the last flower blooms and dies
What am I but molecules and memories
What will the speed of darkness be
When light ceases to move
Will the world withstand chaos
Of violated innocence
Or will we only see again
On the day after forever

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ForeverLastingComa

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  • ForeverLastingComa
    April 23, 2008

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    That was a amazing write!..i read it twice just becuase i wanted to i loved the whole thing and it grasped my attention..thank you for entering and good luck =)


  • risewiththesmoke
    October 8, 2007

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    it seems a LITTLE bit rushed, but the imagery is very good. i especially love the ending and the line

    "What am I but molecules and memories"

    nice write


  • eagleluv
    October 7, 2007
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    GREAT WOW

    For not having written in a while, You did a awsome job, loved it. Please keep it up


  • MissStranger
    October 7, 2007

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    Deserves each and every point

    against the appearence induced by your nickname this poem is A-R-T-I-C-U-L-A-T-E from every point of view: ideas,rhythm,emotions,questions....
    "What am I but molecules and memories"...amazing line!it summs up so many answers!endeed we are a puzzle of choices.
    "Or will we only see again
    On the day after forever"...the end is splendid!so challanging and beautifully penned!this poem made my day!well done indeed!keep up! looking forward to read more from you!