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Dry Summer/Sullied Heaven

 

Katie cries as passion dies,

knee deep in leaves and summer lies.

Fortune stroked on skin so tender

ticked with touch of sunlit splendor.

 

Wearily she cradles flowers,

tucked in green romantic bowers.

Suckled as a babe at breast,

tripping down soft evenings crest.

 

Staring through black coffee eyes,

donning feathers plucked from skies.

Emulating higher days

when dearer faith bought risen pay.

 

Yet still she yearns in flashbulb fierceness,

blinding, brilliant in her weakness.

Praying silent suns to set.

Praying, praying hearts to rest.

 

Fingers claw in fragile matter,

earthen worms to gently gather.

Broken fingers breaching glass

running river's ancient past.

 

Molded hands in kneaded dough,

covered sight in shallow bowl.

Licking fingers, licking toes,

swallowed sugar, tongues do roll.

 

Swirled spices cover roots,

gnarled branches, spinning brooks.

Grounded in a paupers bed,

fires of reason, burning red.

 

Thunder sounds as nature meant it,

shuddered souls in wicked tempest.

Hung to dry in sullied heaven,

yeast to brew in bread, unleavened.

 

Twisted trunk of nature's daughter,

Katie screams as father taught her.

Flesh to blood sears blood of beast,

mourning thrice, unjust release.

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

wolfspiritguide

Prompt: Delectable

ummm, ok
i just heard about a murder yesterday that happened at the house behind my sons and another that happened a couple blocks away and they happenend months ago but i don't watch the news so i didn't know and no one told me because they thought i might get upset...so guess my head is thinking about some not so nice things in the world right now and when i saw the prompt i thought of a man looking at a woman and thinking 'delectable' and well it just went from there, was trying to make it happy but guess i just couldn't right now, it's pretty much more horrible than happy. and ya, i made it all up.

oh, but on the bright side, i got a new puppy and he is so cute but so much trouble, i really should have named him that...or maybe mischief...

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  • PerfectImperfection
    October 14, 2007

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    So very well written lines to convey such tragic thought. Your mind wanders in sullen acceptance of what lies beyond our front doors... Truly thought provoking write. Wonderfully detailed, weaving excellent imagery throughout. Great write!


  • Celticmoon gold member
    October 8, 2007

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    Dry Summer/Sullied Heaven by wolfspiritguide


    Title - 9
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    Form - 10
    Spelling - 10
    Captivating - 9
    Originality - 9
    Reaction - 8
    Rules - 10
    Makes sense - 10
    Enjoyable - 9

    total: 94

  • Frodofan silver member
    October 7, 2007

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    Title - 7
    Style - 8
    Form - 7
    Spelling - 10
    Captivating - 7
    Originality - 7
    Reaction - 7
    Rules - 10*
    Makes sense - 8
    Enjoyable - 6

    total: 77


  • JM Kenyon silver member
    October 6, 2007

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    Dry Summer/Sullied Heaven by wolfspiritguide
    Title - 9
    Style - 10
    Form - 10
    Spelling - 10
    Captivating - 10
    Originality - 9
    Reaction - 10
    Rules - 10
    Makes sense - 10
    Enjoyable - 10

    total: 98

  • Desire gold member
    October 5, 2007

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    Holy Moly!!

    What a prompt and Magnificent take on it busy bee!!
    We had a murder here not to long ago involving a newborn...such a tragedy...
    I avoid the news as much as possible...

    but Happy You got a new puppy
    Woooooooo Hoooooooooo

    Loved the words: swirled spices cover roots

    Keep that quill dancing!!

    Thank You for sharing this Sweet One!
    Many blessings to You in the contest
    Best wishes too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • Frodofan silver member
    October 5, 2007
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    Creepy. But good job. I like the happy note too.

    Good luck!
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