A hedgehog from north of Belfast
Had a foreleg that was stuck in a cast.
He limped and he bumped,
Then exhausted, he slumped,
Until a young squirrel came past.
Said the squirrel to the hedgehog so glum:
"With my handy opposable thumb,
I can help you to stand
Then lend you a hand,
And take you to meet my dear Mum."
Said the hedgehog to the squirrel so sweet:
"If you can help me to get to my feet,
When we walk through the pines,
Stick the cones on my spines,
And in the winter you'll have plenty to eat."
(...Several months later...)
The hedgehog from north of Belfast
Looked out at the woodland so vast,
And he said to his mate:
"Our meeting was fate,
But our offspring will leave folk aghast!"
A contest entry
- Bring Me Your Funny Pen Please by Princess Perdue.
1100 points, ended October 7, 2007, 5 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Bone Appetite by WolfHeart.
600 points, ended January 29, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Birds & the Bees... by Peripatetic.
1500 points, ended January 19, 15 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Congratulation on the Silver. What a sweetly funny poem on interracial romance. Let me know how the kids turn out. With such open minded parents just fine I would say.
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What a great story, and the picture is a great illustration for it!
It is always nice when both partners benefit from the relationship.
The limerick type rhythm and rhyme contribute greatly to the attraction of this sweet fable.
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OMG this is so funny at the end and so sweet about cooperation in a relationship.
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omg, this is adorable! Very Beatrix Potter in its story line and that photo is just priceless!
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That really was huge fun to read. Thankyou for the smiles.
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BANDITS UNITED!
So sorry for my late comment, but it was well worth coming to read...you are so talented to be able to write poetry with humour, this has got me chuckling and chuckling
Such a wonderful inspiration you got from the picture...it's exquisitly engaging, thoughtfully composed, excellent rhyming and so full of imagery that I have to go back and read again for the fourth time
Just imagine though, if they could have offspring
Congratulations on the gold trophy...well deserved
Love and smiles
~Lilac
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cute. i love the humor!
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Im commenting a lot .
Good poem. -
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I just knew it! but I was still surprised which on the surface makes not a lot of sense, but I am sure you will understand. Great write! I can't wait to show my friends!
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huh good
nice
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Nic
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Oh this is delightful. I just love rhyme and limerick but cannot do it well. This is an expert display, Bravo! Sorry for the late post.
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Heheee...cute! Nice flow and rhyming there. Really tickled me too! )
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LOL! This is such a cute poem
and so well thought out. Well
done and very deserving of the
Gold trophy. Congratulations
to you and keep up the wonderful
work here!
Jeremy0826 -
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*smiles* this was an awesome poem... I love the whole story of it, you are wonderfully imaginative! The writing was beautifully done also... you definitely deserved the gold!
Keep writing
Polly -
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Wow thanks for the laugh!! This is such a funny and wonderful story put in limerick form. Very creative and so full of brilliant imagery. I so enjoyed reading
Congrats on the Gold well deserved. Have a wonderful night
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Paperparadox,
What a delightful Narrative and written in Limmerick form! How very creative!
Congrats on the shiny Gold trophy!
You are being spotlighted by your Bandit family today because WE CARE!
Dennis
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this is so cute! the rhyme made it all the more merrier.
this was a much deserved gold!!
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Wonderfully cute, this is the first time that laughed loud enough while reading a poem that I made others stare at me, though, I have to admit, I did not realize it was a chain of limericks until halfway through the second stanza, after which it read much more smoothly.
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This was both cute and very funny, leaving me not knowing whether to snigger or say, "Awwww!" I like poems written in the limerick format, and yours has a nice touch with its narrative quality. Congrats on your gold, and enjoy your day in the spotlight!
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Ha ha. Nice. I like the ending. I like the way this was rhymed too. Very nice. Congrats on the gold.
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Wey Hey!
I love this.
The metre is good and I chuckled to myself as I read it!
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I love this to bits. Its laudable how u could create such an amusing story out of nothing at all n keep your readers both thrilled and smiling . No wonder u won gold for this. Enjoy the spotlight...
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I just love it! Will have to read this one again...Such a cute little story of happy every after and the tiniest little oops...Congrats on the gold
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A very good write. Love the humor. Good imagery, flow, rhyme and tone. Vivid descriptives. Lilting and fun. Good word choice. Nice alliteration and assonance. Rhythmic. Congratulations on winning Gold. Well penned.
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Bandits United!!!
Awwww sooo sweet! This is unique~have read nothing like this my entire life.Serious! I thoroughly enjoyed it.
Can see clearly why this took away the gold trophy It's so amazingly done!!!
A pleasure to read~ Thank you for such a nice poem!
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Oh my goodness, this is positively delightful I can just see it, just hear it lol the story and the rhyme itself are flawless, this had the perfect meter and was such a pleasure to read. My daughter, 17 wants a hedgehog for a pet i have to remind her that it might be a painful little pet and her cat might try to eat it for a snack lol
Congrats on the gold. Be well and be blessed
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BANDITS UNITED OH YEAH!
Takes a very special mind to write such a poem, and you have captured the golden goblet, so your mind is supreme!
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Oooooooooooooooh this is beyond Precious!!
Love this and the rhyme You have so flawlessly weaved!
Congratulations on Your Trophy win
-throws confetti-
Wooooooooo HOooooooooooo
Thank You for sharing Your Talent!
Many blessings to You in all You do
Best wishes too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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LOL, made me laugh. We have hedgehogs in our garden, but no squirrels at all alas.
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this is fantastic! and the twist on the end is hilarious! you are really talented! thank you for sharing this. keep writing! God bless you always
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This is just adorable! the rhythm, the rhyme, i loved the story. Wonderful job on this and a well deserved gold winning trophy.
love & Light
Debbera
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Oh what an adorable poem! I really enjoyed reading it. Great idea you used in this poem, the gold for this is well-deserved.
Thanks so much for sharing!
Keep up the excellent work!
Annie
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AHHHH!!!.. This is really cute my fello poet. I got a real chuckle out of this. You have done a great job. I love the rhyme and the flow. Congratulations on the gold.
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BANDITS UNITED This is your day in the spotlight. Enjoy.
What a darling write you have penned here, loved the limerick style and the rhythm and rhyme of the lines. Great story you tell here- might have scientists wondering about this new breed they see in the forests in your area though. A great golden winner you wrote.
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Lol
wow, this was adorable.
and a good outtake on this.
you are awesomely great.
...Simply Me♥
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Nice one...Outcome a Squedgehig????!
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LOL....this is just so adorable...and thanks for confirming that it is a squirrel, most seem to think it's a mouse Brilliantly written and a great take on the pic. Thank you so much for your cute and lovely entry. Good luck.
Shaz xx
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