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Television Zombie (Triolet)

Losing time, floating downstream
Days spent watching imitation lives
No will to reject this borrowed dream
Losing time, floating downstream.
Frozen eyes refract dancing lights gleam
Mincing minds with thoughts dull as knives
Losing time, floating downstream,
Days spent watching imitation lives

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  • Mirthryl
    April 8

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    Timely topic. Nice use of your repeated lines for emphais. A form I am unacquainted with, but interesting.


    • Mallig gold member
      April 8
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      You gotta try a triolet! I know you can rock it.

  • Ithica silver member
    March 17

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    No need to wonder why they call it the boob-tube? It's brain sucking powers are only second to video games, yet at least those require a bit of participation! I think it is a deviant ploy to pick our pockets, somehow some brain numbing way! Excellent Triolet!

  • Virgoan
    October 26, 2007
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    Short and powerful write. Well done.

    Thanks for sharing and keep writing.

    VIRGOAN


  • Vbear
    October 5, 2007
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    sad

  • Peteskid gold member
    October 5, 2007

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    oh, this thought might become an anthem for a generation, if they could pull away from TV long enough. This is a wonderful insight and a truthful reflection, excellent form in triolet, wonderful expressive rhyme... So very well done...PK

  • Antipodi
    October 5, 2007
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    WoW! WoW! the dul drugery mind of TV ...Frank Zappa was right...excellent verse

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