I cannot wake up another day,
Catching my breath from another dream.
So, I will not sleep, I'll let the agony consume me.
I'll cry out for you with my last bit of breath,
And then thankfully, I'll take my last one.
A contest entry
- PRE WRITE QU ICK- IES by Luminescence.
300 points, ended March 14, 2008, 64 entries
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Oh wow, this is a short yet powerful write. I really enjoyed reading this. You did a wonderful job getting your point across here. Thanks so much for entering the contest and good luck in it.
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Your poems are so honest and raw and obviously written by one who's been there, and might even still be in the neighbourhood. Great write.
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It's Short but..I really like this
Great Write =)
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This was very sad, and deep. I could feel the personal struggle in this piece. Thanks for your entry
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aww.... I think that this is so cute... lol and morbid.. just a tad.. lol great work.
Thank you for entering and participating in my contest and good luck,
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Well, this was very powerful, especially the last line... the only problem is that I wish it was longer! Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.
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Wow. that's so romeo and juliet like. And given the fact that I'm a hopeless romantic type, I love that. I really love the two opening lines, but really the entire piece is just really good in its simplicity. Very good!
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With Pleasure
Oh how heart wrenching for me right now. I want to die in my sleep a lot lately and not wake up to the pain I feel from loosing my son! Just one day sober 3 months and he overdosed 3 weeks ago. First line I cannot wake up another day and last line And then thankfully, I'll take my last one. In the middle where it said So, I will not sleep, I'll let the agony consure me. Oh I can't seem to sleep well at all these days for the agony is consuming me. Excellent Write for me and how I feel with what I'm going through personally. Thank you Kelle Marie, stavykm
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STAY STRONG
This is such a cliche and I know it's hard, but what else can we do. I'm a realist in that, I know things take too much time to heal and during that time, we want to give up...Over and over..I'm relapsing as we speak, but I love my Momma too much. That's a good poem too, A Daughter's Tale. Anyway, thank you so much, this comment means a great deal.
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sad...
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Not sad my dear just life, but thanks for the comment.
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i know thats life,
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Life must be beautiful in world full of only black and white. Good Luck.
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