My entire world started breathing within you
And part by part my life became your tale,
My eyes forgot to see anything beyond you
And bit by bit I became yours.
Scent of the damp pages of my diary
Where you are kept as the spirit of my soul,
Lingers in my senses
Capturing my entire self.
The day I started loving thee
The earth ending ecstasy started breathing in me.
Knowing you are not to be mine
All my love became only for thine.
So I started to prepare for the ending that will give thee a new start
In destruction I got the sweetest pleasure of my heart.
A contest entry
- Title Options Contest. by Poetryintheblood.
450 points, ended October 10, 2007, 5 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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My entire world started breathing within you
And part by part my life became your tale,
My eyes forgot to see anything beyond you
And bit by bit I became yours.
nicely written..love this.
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Shapla I love the first stanza how beautifully you wrote this feelings! Nice title..
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Thank you for your deeply moving entry, Josephine
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Thanks for commenting.
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I think the first two verses are really very good, however, the final verse with its rhyme and old english, although good, makes it feel like a separate poem somehow. Good luck in the contest!
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Thanks a lot for reading my poem with such attention.
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This is really great dear..Love is in the air
and all the best!
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Thanks for reading didi.
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My pleasure dear...
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flows very nicely and overall its a beautiful poem
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