I see you
hiding in your secret world
a world that's ready to fall apart
I know how much it hurts
in matters of the heart
so your love deceited you
at least she has not defeated you
give it time, your wounds will heal
Forget her
instead of remembering pain
take shelter
from tears that fall like rain
smile
it will make you feel fine
some fine day
this world will be yours and mine
we'll work out a way
Author notes
for my new friend SirGir... smile!
Written October 4th, 2003
A contest entry
- October New Members- "Chin Up" Poetry Contest - Hosted by The AllPoetry Greeter Staff by CookieZeal.
300 points, ended November 3, 2003, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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i love this one too. its a lovely thing to write for a friend.
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God advise in this poem, uplifting and hopeful. I like the feel of it, and good advice given in this piece as well.
Welcome to allpoetry and god luck in the contest
Dee -
Sad, emotional and hopeful all wrapped in one, you've done really great with this contest. It's a pleasure to welcome you to AP as well...and I wish you great great luck...and best of wishes in everything you do!!!!
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it's so lovely
thatnks for the tug at the ol' heartstrings.. 
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I've gotta go with the crowd and say I loved this as well. I have lived what you write about, and the advice you give in those final lines is so fitting. It's so hard to move on after love has burnt you, but with a friend like you, I think it'll be a little easier for them.
Note: I think you mean 'deceived' not 'deceited'. -
AWESOME
Thnx for the Write, it makes me feel SO much better. Beautifully written and well done. I hope ur next one will be EVEN better. Thnx again for the lovely poem. -
Enjoyed the read.
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wonderfully written, (comment edited due to problem fixed)
good luck in the contest.
peace be with & blessed be;
shaggy wolf
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This is a very lovely and inspiring tribute poem for a friend. This friend is lucky to have met you and it sounds like you have found a person to help you through as well as you help too. ALways remember that you deserve the best!
Very wonderful poem! You are a great writer!
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Dear SirHob
blue
What an uplifting poem you have here! Beautiful in fact...I found a few spelling errors, but I could still understand...Good Luck!
Thanks for your comments, you're a sweetheart!
Always,
^j^Honesty
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Yep this is a cheer up poem, you did well good luck
Lakota x -
Always so good to have a friend waiting in the wings to pick you up. This is a 'chin up' poem and thank you for entering. Good Luck
Von -
very nice, and uplifting! I'm so glad you entered. Thank you...CookieZeal
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awwwwwwwwwwww this is so sweet! not your usual janra but it's a nice change from the dark depressed stuff... take your own advice SMILE!
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