Genesis 1, Verse 2.
"And the earth was without form, and void;
and darkness was upon the face of the deep.
And the spirit moved upon the face of the waters."
Author: Moses
From where came the darkness?
Are we the work of a heavenly plan?
Were angels at work making a world for man?
Is this just a religious story to control
man's mind, use his hands?
Were we made from creation's plan,
or did we crawl out
of some primordial ooze?
A strike of energy by an anomaly.
A quirk of nature starting life,
resulting in man.
Science without spirit. Man's
testament to himself.
Faith or nature, which is true?
Was I made or did
I evolve from nothing?
What brought me to where
I am?
Man.
Did I come from faith
or instinct?
Am I driven by nature
or do I think?
Why is man the only animal
to develop a moral code of life?
Was I made, or am I
the result of a catalyst unknown?
Swamp conditions being just right,
Seems the question of life
always falls between dark and light.
Am I the seed of Java or
Cro-Magnon man?
How can I be the result of
men half made?
Man has always been man
throughout recorded history.
We do not draw pictures
on cave walls. Man has
written words to tell
his story to all.
We tell our tales of sorrow.
We speak of love, charity,
and our deceits. We speak
of love and glory.
Write stories to enthrall.
A big difference from amoeba
to Neanderthal.
Where instinct ruled.
Survival of the strongest.
no thought, no law.
Maybe a fool ruled the darkness
till light came. Played his own
creation game. Ever watched by the
spirit that moved upon the waters.
Left alone in the dark with no rule or pattern.
Guessing about how to make life
from another's creation, until he heard
a distant echo in the darkness,
"Let there be light."
Author notes
Option 4
In a list
A contest entry
- IS THERE A GOD & WHAT IS IT OPTIONS & WORDBANK by liquidmindforever.
3950 points, ended October 18, 2007, 23 entries
Honorable mention
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Comments
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While there will always be questions without answers during our time on earth, it is what one belives that shapes their destiny. Peter wrote that we are chosen to believe and that's the way I'll die
Joe
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Thank you
Your poem is good but falls outside what I was looking for- ode to the Most High God.
Thank you for entering my contest.
Keep writing.
I wish you the very best in your writing.
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Basically your whole argument is the ol' "we are too complicated, everything had to be perfect conditions, I just can't imagine it without a human-like creator creating everything etc etc", which can be logical to a point, but it doesn't lead to any organized religion that man has made up, nor does it suggest that any religion that man made up was actually divinely inspired.
This is all eloquent and beautiful though and I thank you for the entry, so far it has high hopes of getting gold
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I love the language in this, it's beautiful and intelligent. According to Biblical scholars Moses died centuries after Genesis and the other books sometimes accredited to him were written but that's by the by. You raise some good points but I'm not certain why evolution has to be science without spirit. Why can't God have caused everything to evolve? The Genesis account of 7 days can't possibly have been seven days counted in our hours. This is a thought provoking write.
Peace Georgia
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well expressed and very solemn.... make you think... thanks for sharing
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Rather prose-like and sounds much like a soliloquy. it'd be good as a spoken piece. the last stanza is, by far, the best stanza out of them all. it holds the most omph and feeling. -
AGITATINGLY INVIGORATIVE
Well expressed views of old hat ponderings, to which the Bible offers all the answers if we are willing to believe; if not, then this poem probably rakes the reader's brain over hot coals of puzzlement and despair; it is to my opinion a very fine poem, where much thought has gone into the actual work, which may well be a result of latent amber coal glows from the heart's furnace? There is no awkward area here, or anything else the poem could include: otherwise it would become another poem! DW
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There are many things made from what we have available to our hand. We created none of them. It was here well before man. Man creates nothing new. Knowledge without wisdom lets
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TRUTH IS ALWAYS SIMPLE !
Our ancestors fell from grace due to disobedience and doubt, while obtaining knowledge, before having been blessed with the wisdom of God's Holy Spirit; DW
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You ask a lot of deep questions here. A rationalist might think none of it matters, a philosopher might think it matters whether it matters.
The ancient Greeks believed nothing could occur without there being a greater force to act upon it, to set it in motion. Therefore if we are creatures of reason and intelligence...
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What about wisdom.
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Exactly.
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Wonderfully Penned
In the creation story as recorded in Genesis, God spoke and said Let there be light, and it was so. Paraphrasing of course.
The University of Southern California Science Department has proven that sound waves produced at certain levels do create light, as a result of their propagation.
I just thought that was a wonderful find and thought I would share.
Your poem, is valid in it's think and questions it raises. For the decision about it, are the most personal, a man or woman must make.
Congrats on Honorable mention, Well Deserved.
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wow this is deep
thoughts i ve thought about too during my life
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I think about this all the time. Not many open up and share this feeling that we all know we have deep down, wether we are religious, or not. Great job, I think this is an excellent poem that boggles the mind - we all could use more mind boggling - don't you think?
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inspirational
Very nice work here. You really combined several different wonderful elements of poetry. However, you could have possibly tried to create more flow. -
wow this is what alot of people think about
but you voiced it
great work here
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WELCOME to my contest: IS THERE A GOD & WHAT IS it.
We tell are tales of sorrow.
We speak of love, charity,
and our deceits. We speak
L.1
I think you intend the word "our" tales not "are"?
Am I the seed of Java or
Cro-Magnon man?
How can I be the result of
men half made?
Man has always been man
throughout recorded history.
We tell are tales of sorrow.
We speak of love, charity,
and our deceits. We speak
of love and glory.
Write stories to enthrall.
A big difference from amoeba
to Neanderthal.
Where instinct ruled.
Survival of the strongest.
no thought, no law
Maybe a fool ruled the darkness
till light came. Played his own
creation game. Ever watched by the
spirit that moved upon the waters.
Left alone in the dark with no rule or pattern.
Guessing about how to make life
from another's creation, until he heard
a distant echo in the darkness,
"Let there be light."
I found myself so intently reading the thoughts
and age-old questions that when the poem ended
I was shocked. I was held in the storytelling
of asking and showing, with some nice images
and questions to provoke thought.
You have left us with the question: "Did anyone
say, "let there be light"
I think you have presented and raised many questions and ended with a seeming "answer" that continues
to raise the questions you attempt to.....................
You've done well! I enjoyed the voice from which you spoke and wrote the piece.
Thank you very much.
lovelightpeace
liquid
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Dear Poet,
We're almost there;however you must type out the exact quotation in author's notes if you are using a quote
it also must go above your poem, exactly, with the Source
Then place the option # and option name, e.g. "biblical
quote" in author's notes, im when complete with title and contest name.
THIS IS THE LAST PROMPT! If you are unclear, just ask me. I will not ask you to follow the rules again.
Thank you,
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I Like the questions and the flow of the whole piece. My favourite though has to be the final verse and the last line. It just made it so real for me. Thank you for sharing God bless.
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I like the redraft
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Well I would hope that the contest owner would know where Genesis is from lol and who is the author...well that is a little blurry but we guess who it was! I like the thought patterns in this, the questions it asks, the bible can throw up all sorts of philosophies that are discussed year after year, perhaps there is no definitive answer yet? Love, C
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Dear POet,
Please go back and read/follow the instructions.
If you use a quote it must be in quotations with the Source/Resoure/Author underneath. Both must be placed
above your poem.
Then, your piece must begin by raising a question, using 5 of the words from word bank.
Then, in author's notes, the quote, and resource,
the five words used from bank, and the name of the option, ie "quote" option #2.
After you've done this, contact me via im the title and name of contest and then I will read and
comment on your piece.
Thank you,
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I like peoples religious poems, there aren't as many believers anymore, and I've got to say I pick and choose as well. Post modernism is upon us and its hard to keep your faith!
Well done.
Lexy xxx
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'and there was light'
Your titled interested me was not sure where i would be going but you held my interest throughout ...got a soft spot for the Cro Magnon man .....As the lines were read you capture the essence of the theme and the flow of the words held my interest through to the ending. A pleasure thank you.
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