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As the ink faded

I stare daftly
At these stamps on my wrist,
From a weekend out
Of shallow truths,
A night dancing
This sole away.

Reflecting with a smile,
As I come to realize –
That night out,
Moving these feet,
I was searching for something,
Proof I was real.

It never came,
As these halls still echoed
The hollow sounds
Of what is no longer there.
Screaming out to me,
During an imaginary sleep

In which nightmares mixed,
With this so-called reality,
I was living in limbo,
I was feasting on glass.

Oh, the day did come,
Out of the blue -
As my almanac struck twice,
Quicker than the train –
On which it arrived.

In the form of a smile,
Retribution came,
And I realized –
She could be it.

Author notes

This poem is about one moment standing in the shower as I reflected my weekend out.
It was the first weekend out since I was dumped by the long term girlfriend a few days before.
It's about moving on and getting love back.

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  • Rain-Shot-Rose
    December 18, 2007
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    Great imagery. I loved reading it


  • Beating gold member
    October 8, 2007

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    As the other person said, I too am grateful for your author notes. It helps understand.
    In the opening I actually thought "Oh no, not another cutting poem", but as I got further into the poem I realised that this had nothing to do with cutting at all. Standing in the shower, reflecting. I guess we all do that. And I like how yours is hopeful - realising that something new and good could start. I like that. Nice job!


  • Tarja
    October 4, 2007

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    I really like the fact that you added something in the author's notes... for some reason on AP a lot of poet's miss that and just leave you confused, although this is pretty self explanatory. It's a real inspiring piece. It's also wonderful that you are strong enough to move on and not weep and mope about what DID happen. I hope things work out for you and good luck in the contest.


    • Trent plus pen
      October 4, 2007
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      Cheers,
      I do understand it's not my best piece of work. But it's one of my favourites because it was so important in my life. And your contest helped inspired it.
      So yeah, thank you and good luck judging and stuff.
      Peace,
      Trent

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