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Chronillogigal

Perhaps the thought
of aging
  first entered my mind
     
  when I was young

But I seriously
      doubt it

Time then was irrelavent
  for the most part

This present obscured
  by the fuzzy
        black
          and white

picture tube's conception
        of future

The time clock
      was simply
          a devise
 
Of the serious elders
 
They concerned themselves
    with trival matters
          such as
      punctuality

Because they themselves
  having too quickly aged
   
    concerned themselves
    with trival matters

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  • RatherImaginative silver member
    October 8, 2007

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    The only technical glitch I can mention is the misspelling of "seriously". I love the title, and your descriptions of the perceived immortality that youth has convinced itself it possesses is amazing. This is a thoughtful and reflective poem, but I enjoy the subtle humor of the piece. One cannot truly grow old if one is able to retain that humor.