Heart shredded by
talons of you.
Grounded in place;
speechless.
Dizziness overcomes,
soul becomes lighter,
falling into oblivion,
blackened crevice.
Author notes
Prompt: Falling through fault lines
A contest entry
- Round One of Five by Kei-Aira.
450 points, ended February 5, 2008, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is without a doubt quite powerful and has me thinking as I walk away from the words spoken here. Best of wishes to you and thank you for sharing. Keep that pen handy dear poet.
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Different but still wonderful intepretation, I didn't even think of fault lines at all before this whole contest, you just add to my knowledge and metaphoric thinking =]
Great job
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Thank you! I am glad you liked it
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Very nice! Love the wording here - great take on the prompt! Good luck in the contest!
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this is amazing. a really impressive work, and the imagery is beautiful. i love the repetition of the title in the last line, which is something i do a lot. great job.
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Thank you
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Prompt: "falling through fault lines"
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