Nothing to stop me
Just continuous dread
Too many faults in the simplicity of life
Falling straight through
Terrible faults
A contest entry
- PIF Quickie by seraphim shock.
500 points, ended October 4, 2007, 5 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I think you may have used the word fault a little to much. But that doesn't mean that this isn't a great poem. It is a wonderful poem. I just am not sure if I like the repetitaveness of the word fault. Great wright.
Megan -
hmm... this is deep. it makes one think, about bottomless holes, and being nothing and having nothing to grasp in life. great job.
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Prompt: "falling through fault lines"
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