Drifting outward from rings invisible
Tremors of expectations meet towards the middle
Faults overlooked in excitement's promise
Indecision still falling
A contest entry
- PIF Quickie by seraphim shock.
500 points, ended October 4, 2007, 5 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Wow Mark... way good dude! Loved it... and I'm not sure what else to say to it... really! Rock on! xoxo Meg
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this was a wonderful take on the prompt and was beautifully written yet it had a sense of feeling
it was wonderful well done
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Very interesting. I agree with poeticweaver - you bring the title to life.
Write on.
~*~SP~*~
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Well Done Brother,
You really bring the title to life,
well done with the given prompt bro,
peace, and good luck!
Bro Timothy
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Very nice take on the prompt here! Well written lines to encompass the thought. Excellent penning!
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mm...this seems so peaceful, but reading it is so amazingly full of images and ...not peace. it left me breathless. great job.
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Prompt: "falling through fault lines"
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