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Were Am I ?

As I open my eyes I see stars glowing all around

How did I get here?
How long have I been here?
Why am I here?

As i close my eyes I think what i was doing before.
I see myself fighting.

Why am I fighting?
Who am I fighting?
How long have i been fighting for?

I close my eyes more to think what i was doing before
I was fighting.

I was here but many souls get lost in time and space.

I know how i got here.
I know how long i have been here.
i know why i am here.

I am here because I died.

I have been here for ever.

And why i am here?

 

I have been waiting for you. 

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  • Melissa Burns
    July 9
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    Thanks for the entry

  • Angel of Dreams gold member
    June 23

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    This is very sad yet wonderful. You've done a fine job here, your style is unique and the way you put feeling into the words is amazing. I really like your writes, keep them coming!
    Good luck in the contest!

    ♥
    Kaela

  • Violent Glass
    June 3

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    this was pretty interestin
    the beginning seemed kinda dark but towards the end it evened out i liked it
    it was awesome
  • Life-is-life
    February 18
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    Cool Style

    This is the best I've seen in a while. It could use some twikin'. My suggestsion is make it less of a cold poem, add some personality to it. But keep it your's your the best! Keep it up Ecarioto!!!!

    Sincerely,
    Silver-dove


  • Kikai Ni
    January 23

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    The beginning confusion was hard to follow, but adequately captured my attention at the same time. I try to do that a lot.
    There isn't much of a structure, but the direct lines make for a kind of broken rhythm that I like.
    The ending finality is what I liked the most about this. I feel like it's the best part of this poem and it's what I think is most important about any poem.


  • Lonewolf2008 gold member
    November 20, 2007
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    sweet filled words of love. success in the contest.

  • a dozenglassroses
    October 28, 2007
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    I liked this! I was staring at the sky the other day having similar thoughts

    Well penned!

  • Rose Angel gold member
    October 28, 2007
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    Unique Style!

    You have the gift of leaving us at the end of rope, waiting for what you are leading up to with rather negative statements about yourself, and end it with a pleasant note...I was waiting for you....Interesting style of poetry...Keep that style......on any subject...that is my opinion.....

  • Midnight15
    October 25, 2007
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    Wow

    This one is really good
    You always write really good things


  • flowerfish78
    October 11, 2007
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    very interesting.Holds your attention. Makes you think. Very nice poetry.

  • A u r i e l l e
    October 11, 2007
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    thisis weird but interesting

  • Tenshi Asakura
    October 10, 2007

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    Great Work! i see you are doing much better with your poetry! And you have quite a following. I like how the narrator questions everything and answers them also. this maybe what happens after we die...who knows! great work

  • Purple-Meow
    October 9, 2007
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    i loved it
  • crosscountry07
    October 9, 2007

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    Great write! wow, I am near to speechless! Gosh I don't really know what else to say other than great job!


  • Wee Beastie
    October 9, 2007
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    ooooo.... how beutifully sweet dont we all ask the question of why, for i do know that i have ask that question many times before
    the end showed that it was just you looking back at your memorys and how sweet it is that you are waiting fot that speaial one
    thank you for telling me about this poem
    good job on the write

    ~~Chef W.B.


  • Alyx Cosnahan
    October 5, 2007

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    Oh gosh the ending is so powerful to me. *And why am I here? I have ben waiting for you.* love that. lol I almsot forgot that I was gonna comment. but anyway great write!


  • VirginiaDarling
    October 5, 2007

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    Very interesting and well put poem, I like the last line. Please put your name in your authors notes.

  • Dragon Of The West
    October 4, 2007

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    Wow, that's really good. Even being shorter than what I'm used to, it said a lot in the few lines here. Intricacy and simplicity in it's finest form. Excellent job.


  • dark life 1992
    October 4, 2007
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    Omg I love this poem baba it was cute and amazing wow I am adding to faves

  • Devoted Huntress
    October 4, 2007

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    wow. nice hun. this is a beautifully written poem. I hope you keep it all up. I like it. Nicely done hear are so points for doing so well


  • Child of an Angel
    October 4, 2007
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    Wow

    I'm not ready to die yet!
    Nah j ust kidding, but I really do like this, I love the wait for where you are, i love the insideness of the meaning. If thats even a word...lol...but you know what I mean. Wonderful job, the flow is good as the content too. Spectacular job! Keep the pen flowing!

    Always
    Emily


  • Angel Of Heaven99
    October 4, 2007
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    wow..this is great..I like this a lot. Very well penned, keep up the great work!
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