You say I need to stop saying I'm sorry all the time,
but how can I do that,
when your the only man in my life that,
first told me I was not a mistake.
You say I need to stop saying that I am stupid all the time,
but how can I do that,
when your the man in my life that,
first told me I was smart.
You say that I need to stop saying that I am fat all the time,
but how can I do that,
when your the only man in my life that,
first told me I was beautiful.
WRITTEN AT 8:41 P.M.
WRITTEN ON OCTOBER 4TH, 2007
INSPIRED BY: MY FEONSAY PAUL J. HERZING
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You got across your thoughts well in this one, and left us without any doubt as to the frustration behind all of this, however, a few small corrections wouldn't go astray, for example, all of the 'your' should be 'you are' and what not.
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yes i am right you do need to stop saying your sorry and that you are fat and stupid you not fat you very skiny sometime im afraid to brake you you only way 98 ponds if anything you need to gain weight and you are not a mistake so stop thinking that
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Wow, such a beautiful piece. Stay strong and be yourself dear niece.
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Great
This was really beautiful, and you really should listen to him ;-) Thankyou for your entry. -
dianna you know paul is right you need to stop saying that you are fat look at me im not fat but i am bigger then you and yes you need to stop saying that you are stupid because you are not you might not be the brightest apple on the tree but that does not mean you are stupid and about the saying you sorry all the time not everything is your fault and you are not a mistakes you are God's child and God makes no mistakes thanks for sharing and i hope that paul gets to read this God bless you forever and always love your sister ashley heffner also knowned as SilverRose
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Honey I really like the content of your poem but it doesn't seem complete....Keep it up though, I'm sure your fiance will love it.
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okay
i know who this is too hopefully he reads it lol xD
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Very Good! Hope he gets to read it.
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awwwww......im gona start crying. its really good hun. i can really relate to that, my fiance now, was the first person to tell me all those things to. you did an awesome job.
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