I am still here
my same dreams,
hopes
I'm not leaving
'cause I'm the...
real deal
A contest entry
- 17 People 16 Words by HeavenScent4U.
500 points, ended October 4, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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The background for this is rather soft, where as I took the poem to be rather in your face. A rather interesting contradiction. I liked reading it right through, but I found the ellipsis a little distracting. I think it took a little of the punch away from the last line. A good meaning though, and I feel that I can personally relate to this.
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I see your point, thanks for making it.
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smiling...
I wrote "Still Here" for a one-liner a while back.
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We think alike, I see hahahalol Thanks...
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nice take on the picture
good luck
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Thanks, mercilol
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very nicely done i love the closing lines of this, awesome thanks for entering and best of luck. be well and be blessed
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Like the last line..All the best!
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Thanks so much, lol
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prompt is up
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