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You And I

Let us dance in the twilight
   to the tune of the stars' lullaby,
the wind whispering in our ears
   is calling you and I.


Twirling in the darkness,
   listening to the tree's sigh,
we're in our secret haven -
   only you and I.


Let us sing into the midnight,
   we'll laugh until we cry,
the moonlight shall shine upon us,
   watching over you and I.

 

Let us dream sweet dreams

   underneath the night sky;

stars shall dance before us,

   shining only for you and I.

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Misfortune, and I chose option 2.

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  • shutter-bug
    October 15, 2007

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    this was amazing. i really really like this. the flow was great, and you used romance without a speck of erotica which most people don't understand. this was truely an amazing write. thank you for entering!!!

  • Virgoan
    October 12, 2007

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    I love the way you have stirred love within these words. Well done fellow poet.

    Thanks for sharing and best of luck.

    VIRGOAN


  • oldphotosonlybringt
    October 12, 2007

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    i loved the poem a lot just wanted you to know that you did a wounderful job with your words, great poem thanks bunches and love lots..xxx

  • oldphotosonlybringt
    October 6, 2007
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    i love the poem, it is wounderful, though i will be DQ you, feel free to go back read the rules and re,enter thanks and love lots...xxx