Viewless windows
Pointless
Unnoticed
Unseen
Existence scrapes with motions
Bleeding the very truth from me
A contest entry
- 10x15x15 QUICKIE by HeavenScent4U.
525 points, ended October 4, 2007, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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this was such a wonderful take on the prompt and held a deep depth to it and emotions
it really made the picture come alive
well done bro and congrats on the gold
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Love it! Great take on the picture prompt here. Sullen, yet beautiful. Very well done!
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Nice take! Very excellent job. So much said in such few words! Best wishes!
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Nice piece, excellent work in the time given, and great take on the prompt.
One critique, "Existence scrapes with motions" I find the 'with motions' part of this line to be somewhat awkward. Not sure I have a decent suggestion for a re-word though.
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now this is what i'm talking about. very fitting write here and volumes said in few words. thanks for entering and good luck. be well and be blessed
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